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This Poem was Submitted By: Barbara Ascolese On Date: 2003-08-01 00:24:17 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Untitled Haiku

Whispering Winds are the soothing reward, left by a violent storm.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Brandon Gene Petit On Date: 2003-09-04 13:41:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.28205
Haikus are brief and sometimes difficult to critique....but I give you props for this one. The reference to calm winds during a storm's contrasting aftermath as a "reward" is clever. A haiku that speaks of a contrast existing in nature...well put. - Brandon

This Poem was Critiqued By: Rachel F. Spinoza On Date: 2003-08-27 09:49:08
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.76000
I like the alliterative "W"s here which echo the sound of the wind. It is interesting to capitalize the word "Winds" as this makes the phrase come alive as a proper noun and the sentiment is olriginal and lovely. Whispering Winds are the soothing reward, left by a violent storm. The line break seems arbitrary in the first line. perhaps, in order to get the syllable count and still have the requisite jump in meaning between the first and second parts of a haiku it could be something like [(Soft or warm--or another adjective} Whispering Winds; the soothing reward, left by] The poem echoes the season excellently and gives us a new way to look at the wind. That is the reward of all good poetry - a fresh view of the world. Thank you.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Terrye Godown On Date: 2003-08-16 11:14:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.20000
Hi Barbara.... love Haiku.. especially to critique.. so short and simple. Does this mean I'm a lazy critiquer? You bet! ha ha Unbelievable how something with so few words can connect so intrinsically with the soul. Wondering why you called it "untitled". It's so profound I think it earns a more relative one... how bout "Caressed" ? You'll come up with something I'm sure! Cheerz, T

This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2003-08-13 17:07:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.04167
Love how you took a storm and brought us a whisper. Truely a reward for this reader. You kept the 5,7,5 format in place well done. I am assuming winter by the reference to the violent storm. Well done Haiku Barbara Thanks for sharing. Tom

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