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This Poem was Submitted By: Andrea M. Taylor On Date: 2003-09-09 09:24:17 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Graced

Words from the pulpit Heard by the choir's voices Healed by the singers

Additional Notes:
A mere offering of thanks.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Erzahl Leo M. Espino On Date: 2003-09-26 00:12:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.20000
Hi Andrea, I like the simplicity yet striking words you choose here Andrea! To associate your coming back to TPL as something like a victorious verdict from a church pulpit or court is really cool and at the same time creative! Again, you prove your poetic prowess in this perfect 5-7-5 format and in these enjoyable subjects that never fail to entertain us readers! I like how you enumerate the sequence of events that helps understand the haiku comprehensively. From “words” of “pulpit”, to the action word “heard” by the “choir’s voices” to the “healing process” through the “singers”, the comparisons and the connections are fittingly correct. I find your work skillfully written! Kudos on your wonderful dedication of gratitude here Andrea! The TPL members will truly appreciate it! I am really glad that you reconsider of joining back to TPL and the misunderstanding didn’t cause you to stumble instead it made you strong! Thanks for posting this for our enjoyment! I sure enjoy the read! Oh great title you got there “Graced”! God bless! As always, Erzahl :)

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2003-09-24 16:05:02
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.43750
Hi Andrea, Another great and worthy haiku. This one carries a beautiful message in so few words. There is nothing more lovely than a choir of voices singing hymns. For many years I sang in two choirs, one in church and one formed by PTA mothers and I loved every minute of it. Sometimes I would actually get chills just hearing all the voices around me. Keep writing haiku as I think you have a talent for it. Blessings...Marilyn

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2003-09-11 10:06:51
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90000
And your thanks are well taken my friend......as with all other haiku's your form is true to the 5-7-5 beat and I like the way you choose your words for they certainly get your message across.....thank you for returning and for posting, be safe, God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2003-09-09 19:56:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
Gee Andrea...I take it you think I'm a god or something. I do not preach...but I do feel honoured that you wrote about me in a sereptitious way. You are one sly person! Should I post what I just wrote on the Link?

This Poem was Critiqued By: Jennifer j Hill On Date: 2003-09-09 10:00:52
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
Dear Andrea, so good to have you back. I think we can rest assured that you will be getting plenty of critiques from your fellow poets on TPL. Graced is a good tittle for this offering of thanks. I am a little confused at the 2nd line. It is saying the choir's voices heard? I's possible I am misinterpreting that line. If I understand what you are trying to say I think I must advise you to change that line. I think you are trying to convey that the song is healing the congregation. Is that right? Also "the" is not a very powerful word and I would try to avoid using it in this type of poem. This type of poetry calls for every word to hold much power since there are so few words. Therefore I would say something like "Healing words float down" and kind of go on from there. I don't know if that helps at all. Welcome back! Jennifer

This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2003-09-09 09:47:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Andrea so glad your back. We are all graced and give thanks. Thank you for this Haiku it makes the reader be grateful. Again you keep the format intact and the flow constant. Those that speak with song and appreciation are always thankful for being allowed to sing. (Wish I could still, use to love being in a choir; but those days can never return. I must always remember just being a part of it at one time). I know singers do not necessarily represent song, always; but I see both the physical presentation in your piece along with the thought you present the reader. Well done. Tom

This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne Duval Morgan On Date: 2003-09-09 09:42:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi There, after you're eposide of hurt I just want to say, haiku was the first poetry I fell in love with, in the traditional sense the Japanese took poetry to a level of unbelievable heights, but in this time frame I always have a deep regard for Western style haiku, as you've captured in such a magfificent way here, and automatically I realized from your word selection the intent of this haiku, for me making wonderful heartfelt feelings, for you realize that many of us saw only a poet stating her feeling and emotions, a new member writing with deep feeling and sentiment, using this art form for total expression. I saw nothing improper in your venture onto this site, and if I had been able I would have surely critiqued your previous entries, I think you understand that I was deeply moved by your e-mail, and felt pang of guilt that that I uable to respond, may I take this opportunity and say Thank you, you are wonderfully kind, and your message was gratefully received. I was remiss in no response. I love reading the new membership, and when individuals write with such a consuming desire I believe I understand the need, and I would always advocate and say to them, write, and write, and write somemore. It's only in the experience that we hone a skill, and one see a smoothness develope, and in depth reader automatically understand the drive, alwaus admirable. Just think if you can produce a style, difficult to achieve as haiku, where ultimately the skill will be always georgious, and the writer will be known as having a skill that sipercedes the ability of most. So you write, and continue to produce gems like this, and I promise to be more productive in response. As I used to be, just that now I have so many personal limitations. You keep going, a express what you need to, and I fully expect to see an accomplished, polished writer evole...Honestly!! My best regards and I'm relieved to see this submissions, a treat to behold. Jo Morgan

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