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This Poem was Submitted By: Judy A Badger On Date: 2003-09-12 16:03:36 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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So Nice

Time brings changes, life renewed. Friendship rainbows, multi-hued. Harmony shouts with joyful cries. Live. Love. Life. So nice. Love surprising, Hope springs true. Sweet surrender, me with you. Soft sounds built on healing sighs. Live. Love. Life. So nice. Sharing smiles, sharing tears. Stepping stones through all our years. Heart song speaks through loving eyes. Live. Love. Life. So nice.

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This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2003-10-05 15:39:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.56250
You have captured my attention in your first stanza with your excellent choice of words. Your rhyme is kept together by thought (renewed, multi-hued) well done then you complete the stanza with a refrain. Your second stanza continues along this journey you have taken and another great rhyming sequence followed again by refrain. Finally your last showing the length of time throughout the years makes this poem complete. Usually I do not ask for more but in this case I would and put these words to music and 'Walla' you have a song of love. Well done Judy. Thanks for sharing. Tom

This Poem was Critiqued By: Jennifer j Hill On Date: 2003-10-01 17:54:42
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.08333
Judy, speaking of so nice, it is so refreshing to read this uplifting message. It is exactly what I needed today as I am feeling a little down and this is a nice change from all the depressing poems I have been reading lately. I notice you have the same last name as Erica , whom I just critiqued and I am wondering what or if there is a relationship there? This almost seems like an answer to her poem "Complications of Life" in the first stanza. But not really because it sounds like you are talking to your husband. The title tells exactly what is here and I like that in a title. Right away I want to read and know what is so nice. I am an organization nut and I love this tightly structured form. Your rhyme scheme is eloquent. I think you could get rid of the punctuation and it would flow better, but even as is would be fine. The last stanza is especially nice for this reader as it speaks from the loving heart of someone who has spent a life time together. Nice. "Heart song speaks through loving eyes." I like that! Thank you for sharing and I hope to see more of your work. Blessings, Jennifer

This Poem was Critiqued By: Andrea M. Taylor On Date: 2003-09-21 13:37:04
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.15000
Judy, This speaks volumes of one's heart. You take life with a grain of salt to season it...I like that. I read and reread this, each viewing gives alternate meanings or feelings. I can relate to the stanzas with my husband, children and my friendships. This piece has movement...it flows with live, love and life. This is so nice. It's simple and pure and one finds you in a good place. This is an upbeat share, I thank you for it. No Suggestions, but hold that thought!!!! Andrea

This Poem was Critiqued By: Terrye Godown On Date: 2003-09-16 11:36:45
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.57143
Hi Judy Haven't seen your name on here before! What a refreshing, short and sweet poem this is. It all moves in perfect time with the traditional rhyme scheme. In simple form, it speaks volumes about the nature of loving and feeling loved. I can't say I'm a "period" person with regard to most poetry though. For some reason, using periods at the end of verses makes it sound too much like a monotnous recitation. The period is abrupt and chops off the thought process accordingly. Poetry is as much about whats between the lines and where your mind takes the lines that are spoken/written and not using punctuation in lines give the reader's mind more freedom to elaborate on what's initially fed them... does that make any sense? Of course this is only my personal opinion about periods in this particular "style" you've written in. I've used commas, elipsis, exclaimation and periods at times, but only to enhance some emphasis, pause or reflection on speach patterns I've used. You might try this poem without the periods, just for the heck of it. Of course you may want punctuation on certain lines, like say the Live. Love. Life. one, because somehow it works well with the three separate, one word synopsises you repeat as a sort of "home phrase" in this one. Anyway, thanks for the presentation. Don't take my suggestions as a negative, just a consideration. I enjoyed the poem regardless of that Judy! Please continue to share your talents with us! Cheerz, T

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2003-09-15 07:36:05
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.81250
Enjoyed the structure of this one poet making for a nice easy read and I like the way you repeat the last line giving it a sing song effect to it as well. It feels universal in effect as well for it could be used to a friend, a lover, a husband, wife even as a child grows through the years and the relationships that form within those years on all counts.....really a well versed poem.....My heart does tell me that even if it could be used for others you most likely wrote this for the very special person in your own personal life and the road you two have travelled in order to reach that heartfelt place....like the effect of the stepping stones as well......and again the repeat of the last line in each stanza just adds to it all. Thank you for posting and sharing this with us....be safe and God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2003-09-13 12:12:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.64286
Dear Judy, Yes it is so nice..."Live. Love. Life. "Time brings changes, life renewed." " Friendship rainbows, multi-hued" These are lovely words and the rhyme is rhythmical which is very pleasing to the ear. The next two lines..."Harmony shouts with joyful cries" don't rhyme but the rhythm is retained and the integrity of the poem remains. The second stanza is the same rhyming "cries with sighs" which lulls the reader into the words. I especially like the repetition of "Live. Love. Life. So nice." ..."Sharing smiles, sharing tears, stepping stones through all our years." Beautiful statement for all those that live and love in the same marriage or relationship for all their lives. I enjoyed this poem very much..thanks for sharing. Best...Marilyn

This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2003-09-13 03:59:15
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Judy, This was a simple yet upbeat and merry poem about the good side of life. I especially loved the last two lines of each verse. They seemed to cap it all. It is always in the interest of one’s poetic ambition to break away from the shackles of forced rhyme but even though you use rhyme such as ‘tears’ with ‘years’, the rhyme never seems too forced. The flow, which in my opinion is good and keeping with the spirited tempo of the poem, smoothens out any hint of forced rhyme. It is amazing how poetry, however simple or complex goes such a long way in conveying feelings. This poem would definitely be one of the more simpler attempts at writing poetry but the words with their emotions speak to the reader and convey to the reader, the poet’s appreciation for life with the one she loves. The poem is resplendent with color (multi hued rainbows), smiles, jubilation (harmony shouts), even tears (which over here seem to be fitted in with the parcel of what life brings – calm acceptance of a more serious side to life). Of course, we can’t miss out on the ‘second’ person in the poem which I would assume to be the poet’s lover, partner, spouse…….he seems to be a central reason for the poet’s celebration of life (sweet surrender, me with you) Continue expressing yourself and let the feelings flow. Looking forward to reading more. Peace, Duane Jackson.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen A. Morris On Date: 2003-09-12 18:04:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Judy, I really enjoyed your poem. I like the way you varied the rhyme. For the most part, I'm not into rhyme, but yours was just enough to keep the melody of words going. One suggestion though: You might think about setting the refrain off in its own stanzas. Not sure how that would look, but it's something I thought of while reading your poem. Real upbeat with good thoughts. Good write, Good read. Good Luck. And I will check out that Creative-poems.com. That one I hadn't heard about before. Ellen

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