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For Paula My heart spoke to me, In tongues of spiritual fire, To the very core of me. She spoke to me, Of many things, Love not last nor least. She spoke to me, Of love first seen, Love becoming trust. She spoke to me, Of eyes meeting, Holding on beyond that initial pain. She spoke to me, Of times present, past and futures entwined, By love and shared time. She spoke to me, Of colours beyond the spectrum, Of the human eye. She spoke to me, Of passion and dare, Moving to compassion and care. She spoke to me, With lilt, truth and tone, Carved deep onto my bones. Her words softly spoken, Where they seared, Into my brain. That I love you, And you love me, For ages long gone to times yet unseen. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Jordan Brendez Bandojo On Date: 2003-11-07 22:15:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.86047
Hi Stephen,
What a lovely inspiration for Paula!
This poem reflects the the love and intimacy you share.
And it is not a swear that you love each other forever
but it is God's gift for the two of you. The simplicity of the
poem reinforce the magnificence of the eternal love. Like to note
that your strongest love is powered up by the simplicity of
your words. But the depth of it is unfathomable.
"My heart spoke to me,
In tongues of spiritual fire,
To the very core of me."
I can see that your words are deeply rooted from the heart.
And it is showed here that your words are founded in spirituality.
It is manifested by your phrase "tongues of spiritual fire"
which connotes deep spirituality! When it is heard by a person especially Paulo,
it is deep and worthy of trust. A powerful entrance!
The three lines format it effective to bring out a nice feel as the readers
would take the words into the heart. I'm sure Paula would consider this as
a gift with no compare.
It is also evident in the poem that Paulo is so magnificent that
evry word she speaks turned out to be your daily food that it makes you healthy
of mind and body. Every perspective of what Paula speaks for you is powerfully
detailed here.
I especically like the stanza:
"She spoke to me,
Of colours beyond the spectrum,
Of the human eye."
It is brought about by deep imagination. How your mind soar to high in the
thoughts of Paula! I like the association of "colours beyond the spectrum", it
is physically splendid. It shows that the words of Paula is majestic and full
of wonder but because you are the avid observer, you have absorbed them well!
I just love this. No wonder it ranks high!
Looking forward to read more of your poetry. Jordan.