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Forever Daddy One, two, three, four, five,... I tried counting the stars above But they clustered in zillion "Daddy, their number I couldn't reckon!" Like the untiring efforts you exert for me I become a man of principle and discipline. I was once equipped with a sonar, I tried determining the Pacific's depth But it's unfathomable, "Daddy, its bottom is beyond measure!" Like the paternal love you bestow on me. I was once a capricious dreamer, I yearned I can fly Like a bird gliding from afar While zephyr's blown across the azure sky. Ah, yes, I did soar! You gave me wings Your wisdom levitates me into a lofty seat of understanding. I was once a merchant, searching for fine pearls Risking my life to unknown places like a vagabond, And at last, I've found the place where fine pearls are treasured In your heart, dignity and heroism of an ideal father reside in quintessence. My childhood flashes back When we were flying a kite In the verdant fraught with delight. "My child, hold the string tightly so it won't get lost out of sight!" You uttered in bravery. And you know, Dad? The kite is still flying! Your nobility and greatness hold its string. Now, I grew up With virtue you molded, my armor I learned to take up the gauntlet, I delve into the world Prepared as a militant soldier in a battle With wisdom you imparted, my helmet. Now, let me tell you, Daddy I may be ignorant of the world around me Yet one thing I'm sure I know You do love me and I love you, too Forever long. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2004-01-30 11:37:16
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I have to admit that this poem makes me a bit jealous. I have never had that great a relationship with my family generally, and my dad specifically. Because of the painful things this brings up for me, it's more difficult to break down this poem than it might otherwise be for me, so sorry.
It's a well done poem, quite different than some of your other work, IMO. The words verdant and zephyr made it in there, as I can tell that these are some of your favorites from your other work.
Thanks,
REEG!