This Poem was Submitted By: Drenda D. Cooper On Date: 2003-11-18 08:54:45 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Haiku

             silent reflections      lost in the mirror of time              repeat history

Copyright © November 2003 Drenda D. Cooper

Additional Notes:
This one is about "human nature" ....I wrote it a very long time ago, and any similarities to other works is purely coincidental.... I apologize for the cliche.........drenda


This Poem was Critiqued By: Elaine Marie Phalen On Date: 2003-12-05 13:00:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.94286
Hi Drenda, The link between visual image and human condition is nicely drawn. Sometimes it is hard to tell what is original and what is reflection. It is all in how one perceives the two parts (and whether or not we're standing on our heads, I guess). Regardless, if we fail to see clearly and forget what history has shown us to be true, we will repeat our errors. That "mirror of time" can become clouded by poor judgment and denial. Suddenly, "never again" turns to "well, not often" and then to "just this one more time". Good use of haiku/senryu form [kind of a blend, really] to project the anthropomorphized comment onto a natural scene. I find it striking in its simplicity and don't consider it a cliche. Take Care, Brenda


This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne Duval Morgan On Date: 2003-12-02 21:34:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Very nice, reflective, and the truth emeshed in the proper count, the cadence is great, but most of all the way you present the mirror reflecting, and repeating what happens in time. Really concerning all of life's heartbeats. My favorite saysing is we're just a shadow in time, so I found this haiku excellent. Wish I could type more, but it's very difficult at this time, just to comment and say you have the complete thought here, especially like the use of the morror which records All in time. Lovely and very enjoyable Drenda. Love and best wishes, Jo Mo
This Poem was Critiqued By: Erzahl Leo M. Espino On Date: 2003-12-01 19:49:52
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.75000
Hi Drenda, What you have here is a gem Drenda! A gem from a treasure box of time! It has emerged into something that is unforgettable to the readers. Reading this for the first time would allow readers to review and come back reading it again. Well, it happened to me. It has a unique appeal that is unexplainable! You have captured that mystery yet very revealing. Yes, the depth of your work is undeniably intriguing! This senryu is true to the traditional 5-7-5 form, I like the connection of the words “reflection” and “mirror” and the “time” and “history”. Very clever! The phrase “mirror of time” is originally profound. I like the idea on how we should be always careful with our thoughts and actions. If the experience is worth reminiscing, that is a good reflection but if not, learn to avoid on how to prevent from repeating. I can sense the famous quote that: “We should learn from experience.” Kudos on another display of your talent Drenda! I know you have been writing haikus before and this one is a wonderful share! Simple but beautiful…and striking! No apology for this! You deserve an applause! Keep on writing Drenda! As always, Erzahl :)
This Poem was Critiqued By: Jordan Brendez Bandojo On Date: 2003-11-26 11:49:16
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.76000
How reflective is this verse, Drenda! With only ten words you have created a huge influx of ideas as this piece points out human nature. One's history is not forgotten, it always repeats as time elapses. It may not repeat in such a way that the actions are done again but the memories are brought back and reflected one way or another. I like the use of conrete visual "the mirror of time" to enhance the idea of history repeating. It made me realized that even the hourglass of a person has disappeared still there is a mirror of time to reflect back the the past. By the way, the tone of the poem seems to appear poignant to me because of the words "silent" and "lost". Our wish to reflect the momentous events but it is also inevitable that the sad days are brought back to memories. Thanks for sharing, Drenda. Any Physics updates? SMILE. Jordan
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne M Uppendahl On Date: 2003-11-21 19:00:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90909
Dear Drenda: What a lovely surprise to find your "Haiku." I have been away from home, so very limited activity on the site until today. I am delighted that you have submitted this for comment. silent reflections lost in the mirror of time repeat history It isn't cliche to this reader. The idea of reflections repeating themselves in a mirror is a very metaphysical idea to me. It is a small, perfect gem, IMO. Repeated o's and r's give it a soft ambience. I see in my mind's eye a very old mirror. And cannot help but think of a program I viewed recently which referred to the idea of parallel universes, of probabilities. Perhaps the probabilities are mirror-like with one another. This is where this poem takes me! Thank you for this. All my best, Joanne
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2003-11-21 17:45:41
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.67857
They do say history peteats itself every twenty years or so and you know......if I stood in front of a mirror and looked deep within I would see myself as a young bride of twenty and twenty years later I stoood and watched my daughter walk down the aisle to meet her husband to be......today I look back upon time in that same mirror and see myself at 37 facing divorce......my daughter is now 37 and facing divorce....I pray this stops with her though for I have a lovely granddaughter that should not find such sorrow in a lifetime.... true to form 5-7-5 your words certainly do bring forth images from within my soul......thanks for posting and sharing this with us....you be safe my friend and God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Wanda S. Thibodeaux On Date: 2003-11-19 07:32:52
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Drenda, Hope you have been well. I find this to be one of the hardest forms of poetry, yet you have aced it with this gem. What a true statement it is. When we look back, we see the cycle of life as it makes the circle, rounds the corner of our minds and hearts. This time, though, we are perhaps more ready, more willing, a lot more understanding. God has given us the power of "silent reflections" as a learning tool. For all of my horribly sad memories, I have a million happy ones, each giving a life lesson. I am thankful for them all. Your poem is concise, to the Haiku point, you might say. One of my favorite concepts also. I hope to be back soon. I've missed TPL and all the fine poets and you are amongst the finest. Best always, Wanda
This Poem was Critiqued By: Sandra J Kelley On Date: 2003-11-18 16:26:25
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.09091
I once stood in the hall of mirrors in the palace of versille -that isn't spelled right but - the mirrors are arranged so that if you look into one you see yourself reflected in the mirror behind you and the reflection of the mirror in front of you reflected... Endless reflections of your front and your back. It is like seeing your past and your future Your poem reminded me of that experience. Following modern american rules for haiku this poem works well. Sandra
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2003-11-18 15:45:03
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Drenda, Everytime i read haiku i can only think "God bless you." Maybe i'll try one some day. I have very good examples to learn from her, yours included. Hmmm . . . sort of history working backward, the past reflecting the present. I like that touch. Mark
This Poem was Critiqued By: Jennifer j Hill On Date: 2003-11-18 11:38:45
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.12500
Hi Drenda. What a morning I'm having! First Debbie's "Be Silent" and now your Haiku. The Lord is working on me, no doubt. I know, this is not necesarily a religeous theme, but for this reader there is much significance in these few lines. Memories can serve as one of the best reminders of past mistakes and things done right, alike... Or just things we forget to keep in the fore front of our minds that suddenly, through the Spirit, are found reflected in the mirror of time (reflected in the fractal of our minds, prompting us). See what I mean? You are causing much 'reflection'. This is a well written Haiku with mulitiple layers of meaning. Thanks for the food for thought. Blessings, Jennifer
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2003-11-18 09:06:01
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.20000
Hi Drenda, This is a great haiku...it has all the right elements but more importantly it carries a profound message. You have taken the adage "history repeats itself" and turned it into a supberb haiku. When I first attempted haiku I thought it would not be so difficult...wrong! It certainly is a challange and anything but easy. You have done an excellent job with this one! Blessings...Marilyn
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