This Poem was Submitted By: Erica L. Badger On Date: 2004-01-14 18:09:40 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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A Poem to Parents I have been molded
I have been shaped
I have been pieced together
Day by day.
I was given a heart
I was given a soul
I have these only
To keep my body full.
So as you can see
I was started from scratch
But you filled that soul
To make us both match.
I grew and I flew
In your loving hands
You taught me to give
You taught me to dance.
But now I am ready
To fill me with me
You gave me the basics
Now it's my turn to be free.
I'll keep you with me
Wherever I go
And know only this
I will always love you so. |
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Copyright © January 2004 Erica L. Badger
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This Poem was Critiqued By: Debbie L Fischer On Date: 2004-01-27 17:37:42
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
Erica,
This piece truly tugged at my heart as I recently experienced the marriages of my two daughters.
These words expressed here are words that went through my mind..I taught them what I knew..I told them to dance, to never let go of their dreams and I will be with them wherever they go. What a beautiful tribute to your parents. I know they are proud. Your poem is simply stated with a wonderful message. Keep it up.
Deb:)
This Poem was Critiqued By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2004-01-21 14:34:36
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.90476
What a touching poem about family. It makes me pine for a better relationship with my own family. I love them and all, I just don't like them all that much. I guess it's for the reasons you list as being positives, for me I had a sincere lack of these gifts. So, as nice as your poem is, and well written, it makes me a bit sad. Sorry. Maybe you intended something different to show, and it does indeed. So it's not your work at all, in fact.
Thanks,
REEG!
This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2004-01-18 14:26:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.76471
Erica--Superb poem of address for the title. You've put together an excellent six stanza quatrain.
The repeat phrases in stanzas #1, #2, and #4 ("I have been..."; "I was given..."; & "You taught...")
gives the piece great organization and reemphasizes the title as well as the theme.
Nice end rhymes (scratch/match; grew/flew; me/free; go/so) produces good ebb and flow musical tones
in stanzas #3 thru #6.
This piece also serves as a great list poem/tribute to parents: sequential attributes credited to
the environment/parents/higher power in the first four stanzas. In stanza #5, an adroit twist/turn
that most of us parents experience or should be preparing ourselves for.
In stanza #6, a very touching ending to a textbook presentation by a loving, grateful, tactful,
and repectful "child." Thanks for sharing this poignant effort. TLW
This Poem was Critiqued By: Robin Ann Crandell On Date: 2004-01-18 00:49:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.66667
Erica,
This poem reads very well. Simplistic, but touching. I only hope one day my son will be able
to tell me all the words that you have written here. It's always a worry if I raise him right.
Hopefully, with the work of God with me.... he can write something like this.. to me.
Thank you for sharing.
Good poem, keep writing.
Robin.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2004-01-15 14:07:23
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.70000
A Poem to Parents and one that should be shared with parents......As a parent I know we try our best to raise our children with an open heart knowing someday we must let them go to live a life of their own only hoping and praying as they do that we taught them right.....your words tell us that we have....you are so open ad honest with your words.......it is a pleasure I am sure for your parents to read this.....the emotions that you send forth touch one's heart and soul...
I love the way you ended it too letting them you that you will always love them so.....some children have a hard time telling their parents they love them growing up let alone once they are......a superb piece, well structured and from the heart. Thank you for posting and sharing this with us...Be safe and God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2004-01-15 12:13:57
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.46667
Hi Erica,
This is a lovely about a child turned into a grown up and ready to
leave the 'nest'. This can be such a sad time for parents but after
all we raise them so we can let them go and make their own way. The
problem is we never really know if we are done and even worse if we
have done a good job. You have used such loving phrases in this piece
of love and used great descriptors to reveal a happy childhood and your
gratitude for it......"molded/shaped/pieced"....given a heart and a soul
to keep the body full...I think my favorite is "I was started from
scratch but you filled that soul"..."you taught me to dance but now I
am ready to fill me with me"...very true...parents strive to give
their children the tools they need to fly on their own...good parents
do this but I am sad to say not all parents...."I'll keep you with me
wherever I go"...great line to end this loving poem to parents.
Thanks for posting and letting us enjoy.
Blessings...Marlyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Donna L. Dean On Date: 2004-01-15 04:21:03
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Erica, what a lovely poem to a parent or parents. I hope to gave this to yours. It is nice to be appreciated, and children seldom convey this. Good job.
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