This Poem was Submitted By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2004-01-20 01:20:03 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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A Jar And A Bump Out of my usual box
Empty out my usual rocks
with a jar and a bump
I stand there shocked
As they lay in a lump
I didn't even know they were locked
up in there....
In who the hell knows where
Still I stand, mouth ajar
I'm right here, but feel so far
I find I'm a healer
White Gold Wielder
Joining our hands
with shining bands
A smile, a touch
not all that much
And now all this I see
Thanks to thee... |
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Copyright © January 2004 Regis L Chapman
Additional Notes:
This poem was written for my friend Lisa Kersey, my old massage therapist. I used to dogsit for her and boyfriend. We used to have very in depth conversations. During one of these she pointed out some things to me that made a lot of sense, and changed a lot of my attitudes about things into more positive views. My general attitude after that was much improved, and I owed much of that to her. This was written in June 1999.
Thanks again Lisa, wherever you are...
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2004-02-05 07:31:29
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.57692
This has been a fun read poet......good structure, nice word flow, images as always you project with the flare of your pen and I enjoyed the rhyme you also presented with this one.....hope your therapist/massage healer has been able to read and enjoy this as well. Thanks for posting, be safe and God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Robin Ann Crandell On Date: 2004-01-21 22:56:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.80000
Regis,
This is such a cool poem. I find humor in the poem because I can relate it to my life.
I will explain.
Out of my usual box
Empty out my usual rocks
This partial stanza is so cool. I take it as my life. We all seem to have a comfort zone,
which we tend not to swade from. I can see myself..."emptying out my usual rocks" which for
me means my everyday.. unswaded life.
with a jar and a bump
I stand there shocked
As they lay in a lump
NOW!!!! This is just great!!!! Okay, here goes. "with a jar and a bump...I stand there
shocked....As they lay in a lump" This to me is like realizing that you think you
have so much in life, whether it be riches, friends, family, personal, or even business life,
but when you see it laid out in front of you... all you have is a lump. For the box
(comfort zone) that you have lived in your whole life, isn't much of a life at all, for you
have closed the world to enter. Great!
I didn't even know they were locked
up in there....
In who the hell knows where
Still I stand, mouth ajar
I'm right here, but feel so far
To me, this is when reality hits. You have found all of your emotions locked up insided
of yourself. Not even knowing they are there, and why they haven't been around before
this event. To this reader, "still I stand, mouth ajar"...."I'm right here, but feel
so far" .... to be amazed at what we finally see the life that we are living is
quite a wake up call sometimes. And this part of the poem really hit this reader hard.
Knowing what it is like to feel so far... from what you have expected to come ... I am
sure a lot of people can relate.
I find I'm a healer
You realize your weakness and you fix them. Here, you are healing yourself.
White Gold Wielder
Joining our hands
with shining bands
You have come out of your box (comfort zone), and have given the love, respect, trust,
and another life a chance out side of your "box." You, "joined..hands" for what I take
as being married..... "with shining bands."
And now all this I see
Thanks to thee...
This is where your thank-you's come into play. For you thank your friend Mrs. Lisa Kersey
for giving you what you have know. I love when friends play a big part of my life. However,
you have to remember to thank yourself too.... for listening to her. :-)
Absolutely a fabulous poem. I really can't pinpoint what I enjoyed about it the most, I just
really know that I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing.
Robin.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ronda Michelle Nelson On Date: 2004-01-21 09:48:29
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.44444
Regis
This poem makes me think, the discovery of something in us, and the shock of when it is
revealed! and how it can change our lives. I liked this little ditty! I think most of us
possess the kindness and compassion that is most needed in this world, we just wrap so
many things around it, that it gets buried untile someone can point it out to us. That is
what i got out of this. I hope I'm on the right track. Anyhow, from my standpoint..Good Job!
Ronda
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