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God's Intervention of Abduction My mind has a way, of dealing in selective thought. I have paid my dues, for each dark shadow thought has brought. So brilliantly unaware, as God abducted those dark shadows of past. When my thought pattern changed, into freedom when I let go at last. I ask God where my thoughts, of dark shadows were placed. As God spoke to me and said I confronted each one! So he carried them off past beyond to waste. He has left behind my before and after thoughts, before dark shadow thoughts were born. Reversing them back in time for me to disimbrace. Emptying my dark shadows in a place, burdened with existence to be scorned. Where dismissal lives in total disguise and permanent disgrace. Never allowing past dark shadows to shed its ingrained mask... Becoming what it wears into a hollow form so scorn now worn, As far as the east is to the west and the north is to the south, living beyond yonder way into the deepest of the deep lands of waste. Before shallow, hollow, disgrace, shadows life existence was ever born. As by now thoughts of dark shadows so hollow, shallow now are selectivity dismissed. Into desegregating that is now dismembered and dissolved, as so into nonexistence. My mind forgets what it has forgotten... Due to me letting go and listening to God's instructions. As I must confront all things done by me or to me so rotten, in order for God's intervention of abduction. |
Additional Notes:
I have submitted this poem to American poets Society as it was accepted for publishing.
I have changed it a bit. I have not given American Poets Society rights to publish this poem as of this time.
This was the first poem I submitted to any poetry contest . I did not know about The Poetry Link until now and would like feed back on my poetry as well as get involved in the family of your great Link.. This poem has been copyright to me and the anthology is copyrighted only as a collection to the American Poets Society should I sign. I am very open for any suggestions to my work to better improve myself as well as helping others!
This Poem was Critiqued By: Darlene A Moore On Date: 2004-04-03 00:21:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Dear Cathy, I have been absent from TPL for awhile, so do not take it amiss when I state that the first 14 line are almost the complete poem. The latter half tends to ramble, tightening would benefit this piece a lot. You don't need to force the rhyme...I suggest you check out some articles about poetry contests (it has a list of what to avoid) at www.utmostchristianwriters.com ....there are some terrific resources there for the aspiring Christian poet.
I do love the line towards the end "My mind forgets what it has forgotten".
The initial line of the poem is quite a grabber and great intro.
I wish you the best in your writing endeavors.