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My Summer Dream Cabin It hides deep in a steep canyon, its north side crocheted in webs of reindeer moss; its throaty song joins in harmony with the stream cavorting nearby. Wood smoke puffs from the chimney, (dit-dit-dit dit-da-dit) mountain code for: someone is home and all is well. A high-country garden yields young crops-- lettuce, radish, arugula-- a salad bar for all creatures hungry for the taste of green. Animals, wary at first, sense that the intruder means them no harm. Finally, they feast openly on the strange leaves with exotic flavors and allow themselves to be photographed. The nest-building, the denning, and burrowing continue, for the nurturing of youngsters is a most serious and time-challenged business. The nurturing of my own soul is serious as well; after years of running the hot, sweaty race, it is now time to relax, to fill my cup and drink deeply from the glacial trickle. |
Additional Notes:
a. this is revised--I hid the previous one. b. the morse code is real c. I will be on vacation from
March 29 thru April 3--will be taking my laptop and will try to answer & rate all critiques because I
do look forward to feedback. Many thanks!
This Poem was Critiqued By: Elaine Marie Phalen On Date: 2004-04-07 21:35:57
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.93103
Marcia, what a glorious tribute to this vision, this place of peace! S1 is just superb by way of introduction. "Crocheted/in webs of reindeer moss" - wow. I think this poem nicely complements our poetry reading of Louise Gluck for this coming month.
You are the mistress of line breaks, you know. Not tomention fabulous nature imagery. The poem's tone is so uplifting and calming. From the simple gifts of the garden to the wary but curious wildlife, you've set such an engaging scene!
The Morse Code - S.R. - intrigues me because I'm wondering why those two letters would be used. (S'all right, maybe?)
I also enjoy the way you move from the nurturing of the young animals to the spiritual mothering that this place of peace will provide for you. "Glacial trickle" is a detail to die for! It makes of the icy coldness a beautiful thing indeed.
Sorry this is brief but it's almost the end of the contest and I did want to let you know how much I've enjoyed the poem!
Take Care,
Brenda