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Actuality In fact, I hunt what stares me in the face As if there’s darkness everywhere, or worse: Light around me on all sides, but my eyes Can’t catch one simple edge of what I hunt. It’s here. But I’ll keep that pleasant light on. It lets me pretend that I’m still looking. In the mirror, too perfect, no clue lies. I am conjured there: do I see nothing? Why can’t my heart show itself in neon Right across my forehead? I hate riddles. I am one. Damn. Why do I hide myself Ignore myself, pretend I don’t exist? It’s not too late, but I need to be brave. I nod here, smile there, make glass promises, And I watch them fight the magic fading. Lovers, children, all live on fantasy. What do I feel? I left, and am, the clue. There’s the dark truth of me in the mirror, Right where it left me. Right before my eyes. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas Edward Wright On Date: 2004-03-31 13:34:04
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.25806
Mark-
This is a beautifully rendered piece. The language is simple and clear, no big words, but plenty of big and deep important ideas. And I love the ending: The last three lines really wrap the work up nicely.
well done.
tom