This Poem was Submitted By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2004-05-28 13:21:59 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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The Watcher lounging between this and that
my quirky friends are often of
a weighty form,
formidable cast
with us
coquinas in the shore sand
the quark sprinkles in unseen
in my head
and my hat
strains of calculus
naught under my command
count to the 23rd power
of eighty
mass and massive flower
Mr. and Mrs. Late and lately
say hello and things
but I don't rely upon them
singing the seeing strings
but in all probability they will show
you never know
sound and volume surpassed me
long ago
solid and liquid state their case
nothing is lost in death beneath
ten twelve fifteen base
all to the refrain, save regret
all to the gain in ever expanding expressions
Sir Caught and Dame Confession
I introduce their bequeath
prior and yet unmoored
nigh a sigh seen and yet ever been
The Watcher n-ever shows the face |
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Copyright © May 2004 Regis L Chapman
Additional Notes:
This is a complex work, quite obscure in concept, but so is the whole of physical life and it's various forms and unseen mysteries. This was meant to scramble much of the message, as it is around us. Even the feelings we have about God and godliness are uncertain in the quantum fashion. Another consideration in the JBB inspired vein, but also due to my listening to "I Talk To The Wind" by King Crimson. I was struck by the pompousness of the words, but how apt they are in consideration of the whole of things. Also partially inspired by "The Watcher" from Marvel Comics, and what he may or may not see.
It is also a commentary on science itself, how detached everyone tries to be- and fails- both crowded and crowned by their own subjectivity.
I hope it's not too "out there", but it is "out there" kind of intentionally.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Marcia McCaslin On Date: 2004-06-03 22:13:41
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.61111
Well, Regis, I guess it is "out there" but it had a flow of consciousness--I could discern the Planner of the
Poem behind it all and that's why I'm commenting. I liked it in its "out there-ness". Enjoyed the pointers
at some physics and high-math. I don't have to understand things exactly, to enjoy them. (There I am in a
nutshell). Thanks for posting this complex piece. Marcia
This Poem was Critiqued By: Jordan Brendez Bandojo On Date: 2004-05-30 04:47:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.94118
Hi Reeg,
Apparently you are true in your additional notes. Grasping the message
of this piece is headcracking for me though I studied Physics! Hahaha!
You really have the special quirk in expressing things in your "quantum" presentation.
I believe in you with respect to that! Your title seems to suggest
a plain message in the body but I am thrilled by the content's complexity.
I am not lounging in reading your poetry but I am excited to the highest
energy level in the valence shell like an electron. Hehe. You know, when you
mention Physics concepts like quantum/quarks, I am really excited though might
have forgotten the concepts. My work right now is not into Physics but computers.
I am working like a Computer Engineer! Hehe! After graduation last 2001
I have not landed a job yet that my field of study applies. But it's ok I am enjoying my 20's.
Too much for that, back to the poem...
I like the presence of letter 'q' and 'k' in your poem like in quirky/coquinas/quark/sprinkles/.
This sets me up to the world of Physics. Oh, you also mention calculus. You know, I like calculus
very much my grade is very high in calculus I got an A+ modesty aside. Math should go with Physics
because Math is the language of Physics.
As a watcher, I can see that that your poem here has unseen mysteries that no one can unfold
except you. You commented "godliness are uncertain in the quantum fashion". I strongly agree!
Mysteries in life is not resolved by Mathematical calculation or Quantum representation.
That is why we believe in God! And I believe in your writings as well! Gudluck!
Thank you very much for sharing, Reeg!
Jordan
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas Edward Wright On Date: 2004-05-29 13:13:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.42857
Interesting. Has a nice rhythm to it, and is chock full of nuts (in a good way)
I wondered if "bequest" would work better than "bequeath" but that's not important to the overall
message.
I enjoyed the many twists and turns, the math, the scientific, even Caught and Confession.
Watching.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Nancy Anne Korb On Date: 2004-05-28 21:58:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.28571
This poem seems to me to be a math problem....somewhat how I feel when I'm trying to deal with chemistry or algebra...."The Watcher n-ever shows the face" .....n=0. You're correct that it is obscure, but I loved the closing line. The rest, truly made me think. The meter and the feeling are there...oh who am I fooling...I understood very little of this poem, but despite myself, I liked it, as I do most of what I've read of yours so far. "Sir Caught and Dame Confession"....
This Poem was Critiqued By: Wayne R. Leach On Date: 2004-05-28 18:56:01
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.32143
Reeg, I read it several times, and thought I had it, but I'm still not sure. I enjoyed the poetics contained, but the message was just out of reach for me, I think. Parts I could grab, others elude me - I think because I never got into the quantum theory stuff. I did okay in basic math, science, etc. It is certainly interesting, and I'll undoubtedly return to read it again and again, but for now, I gotta get onto something else. I do appreciate the effort that must have gone into a piece such as this, so hope I can devote more time and maybe input in the near future. Best wishes for happiness and peace. wrl
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