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This Poem was Submitted By: Sandra J Kelley On Date: 2004-06-06 19:46:33 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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10:26

It is a strange time, in a strange place all over the world, people are forgetting what stopped them. I am remembering a time when there were angels. A time when there were twilights and bonfires, captors and liberators, souls and answering winds, The fire crackles in its place. It is precisely 10:26 the world has not yet stopped turning. I am waiting for the sun to rise.

Additional Notes:
This is another revision I am still not sure of where this one is going.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Rachel F. Spinoza On Date: 2004-07-02 12:57:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.94118
With a delicate touch and subtle aside you bring us alive into the moment - with reverence It is a strange time, in a strange place all over the world, people are forgetting what stopped them. I am remembering a time when there were angels. yes, there were once [amazing and freshly wrot observation]- Perhaps now is the time for them to return. Past time really. A time when there were twilights and bonfires, captors and liberators, souls and answering winds, I think - souls - is jarring in this list - perhaps it was meant to be. love the "answeruibng winds" The fire crackles in its place. [an odd phenomenon indeed for fire to be contained - love it] It is precisely 10:26 the world has not yet stopped turning. I am waiting for the sun to rise. Yes .Marvelous. Brava

This Poem was Critiqued By: Wayne R. Leach On Date: 2004-06-28 22:19:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.32432
It is certainly a fascinating journey - so far. I will be truly interested in its final destination. Time is one strange creature, no? The spinning orb is one strange place - at times, no? You might consider a hyphen at the end of S1, instead of the period. Then put that period at the end of S2. Then, after the 1st line of S3, you might think about a semi-colon instead of that period, and a comma after 10:26. The punctuation guru [nut] has struck! Well, it's nearly 10:26PM, and I must rest for the morrow approaches with its work ethic in tow. Thanks for posting this most interesting beginning. So far, so very good. Peace. wrl

This Poem was Critiqued By: Edwin John Krizek On Date: 2004-06-17 13:22:23
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.00000
Dear Sandra, I enjoyed this poem. I too remember a time "when there were angels" and when there was a true sense of right and wrong in the world. I too have had the experience of being caught in time. The kind of thing where you look at something familiar like a clock and are hit with a sense of confused stillness. Good job. Ed Krizek

This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2004-06-09 13:25:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.25000
Sandra--After revisiting "10:26 Revisited", I think this one reads more like a sequel than a revision: in my humble opinion, 10:26 is totally different in sentiments and tone. This speaker/protagonist/insomniac refers to the strange time (10:26) world wide (not a.m. nor p.m.) being in front of a fireplace commingling and contemplating past and future of humanity. Sorry if I misstated your intentions. I enjoyed this melancholy and somber read. Thanks for sharing. TLW

This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas Edward Wright On Date: 2004-06-09 11:17:29
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.50000
It is a strange time, in a strange place. All over the world, people forget what stopped []. I remember that time when angels - A time when there were twilights and bonfires, captors and liberators, souls and answering winds - The fire crackles in its place. It is precisely 10:26 the world has not yet stopped, yet turns - I await the rising sun [and here you need to fill in the hours between 1026 and sunrise with whatever it is you're doing or thinking about that stopped the world or made it strange] tom

This Poem was Critiqued By: G. Donald Cribbs On Date: 2004-06-08 10:07:11
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Sandra, Wow. There is great tension throughout this piece. It reminds me of Thessalonians, or Revelation...kind of a feeling that references the end of the world. Certainly a spiritual piece. I get the sense that your spirit became acutely aware of the feeling that there is significance in the 10:26 point in time. Things happening all around the world, but ironically, the fact is that it is not 10:26 everywhere in the world, just in two places, but even still, those places are on the opposite ends of the earth and they're a.m. and p.m., on two different days. What does that reveal about the direction here? Where is it your soul and/or your subconscious is heading? I am eager to know where that is! I was totally hooked by the casual way you delivered the first stanza. "people are forgetting what stopped them" is superb! I love the ending. Hope this feedback helps you in your revision process. I'm definitely looking forward to what you come up with. Warm regards, Don

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