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This Poem was Submitted By: sheryl ann minter On Date: 2004-06-09 12:29:06 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Dragging Time

Dragging time, en-capsuled now in a memory. Raising spirits through thought of unconditional love. Rushing forth towards the light of love, or the fire of passion. Devils advocate playing with our soul. Temptuous horns we wear, Floating amidst angel’s halos. Hold the hands of father time, Tie them tight behind his back. Dragging time, preserving the spirit of today.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lennard J. McIntosh On Date: 2004-07-07 16:07:11
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.10000
Re: "Dragging Time" Oh yes, I hear you, poet. And what a skillful way to use a well-worn phrase, in reverse. I have never thought of capturing the joys of this minute by simply, "Dragging time." This is truly the mind of a poet, splendidly employed. Congratulations! Len McIntosh

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2004-06-19 01:58:43
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.85714
Sheryl, A truly wonderful title. I also liked "temptuos horns" - the devil's capital excrescence in the from of a saxophone, through my mind's reading of "tempestuous." And then the coinage, "temptuous." A portmanteau phrase. I don't think i spelled that right. You will notice that about me. Welcome, and brava. Mark

This Poem was Critiqued By: Gerard A Geiger On Date: 2004-06-11 20:21:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.16667
Dear Sheryl; A very creative work...personifying father time as one who somehow could control time...slow it...drag it...for we mortals to enjoy periods of sensual pleasure for longer periods of time... Knowing as we do that most of life's sensual pleasure is tinged with both good.."angels halo's" and bad "devil's horns" subconcious motives. I like the bold way in which you describe this past bittersweet memory...which must have been quite gratifying at the time... Thanks for sharing this inventive piece.. I enjoyed the ride! Gerard

This Poem was Critiqued By: Wayne R. Leach On Date: 2004-06-09 22:05:04
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.50000
Hi, and welcome, sheryl. I don't believe I've had the pleasure of reading you work. I like this interesting perspective and the great imagery. Delaying time to enjoy the moment, the love, the passion. Holding and tying the hands of father time is superb. I couldn't find "temptuous" in my MW dictionary. Should it be "tempting" or "tempestuous" maybe? And one other little question: Should "angel's" be "angels'", for I think to have more than one halo, you need plural angels, and "angel's" is singular possessive. Picky, ain't I? :>) Beautiful submission. Thanks. Peace. wrl

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