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This Poem was Submitted By: Erzahl Leo M. Espino On Date: 2004-09-17 08:34:59 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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japanese verse 59 (Lake)

Mirror on the floor Who is the fairest of all? - My eyes see God’s face

Additional Notes:
- Inspired by the stillness and tranquility of the lake where grandeur of the mountains, luscious pastures of the mountainside and the vastness of the cobalt sky are all reflected on the water. I bring all glory of these creations back to the awesome Creator! What an amazing view! :) - To Joanne U. – for her kindness and generosity.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Latorial D. Faison On Date: 2004-10-05 22:35:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.80000
Erzahl this is awesome! It's cute, quaint and phenomenal. God is the true beauty in everything. You capture this creatively and poetically. Thanks for sharing this at TPL this month. I enjoyed finding it on my list and reading. Great job. Latorial www.latorial.com

This Poem was Critiqued By: Gerard A Geiger On Date: 2004-09-30 15:05:12
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.75000
Dear Erzahl; What a wonderful and refreshingly new description of a lake through Haiku. Mirror on the floor....this is exactly how it looks at a placid lake where I go...You can easily see the reflections of the trees in the water as well as the clouds and sky.. Erzahl I know this only looks easy and simple because you have hit it exactly...an astute and admirable work.. I especiallylike "My eyes see God's face"... looking at the reflection of trees and sky in t6he lake... we know this is true and an appropriate approbation of the Image being viewed Thank you for sharing Gerard

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2004-09-19 15:35:42
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.00000
As for the form and count my friend we know they are perfect...as for the beauty of it all reflecting nature you have once more mastered it well........the water, indeed like a mirror on the floor, who is the fairest of them all? As with Alice in Wonderland but in this version we are brought to a place where the surrounding beauty of the area including mountains, meadows, valleys, blue sky above reflect together the face of God for He alone is all consuming and all there.....I am the air you breathe , the sun that brightens your days, the moon to light your night, I am that I am....... Thanks for posting and sharing with us, be safe my friend, God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2004-09-17 10:51:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.91667
Erzahl--Although nature inspired, this awesome verse is Senryu (human nature themed) Excellent metaphor for "Lake" (Mirror on the floor). And, was there ever any doubt about your query in line two? Great epiphanizing of that amazing view as described in your notes. Isn't it peculiar how these ditties keep finding the end of your pen- smile? Masterful done and Uplifting as well. Thanks for the chills. TLW

This Poem was Critiqued By: James Edward Schanne On Date: 2004-09-17 10:32:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.17143
words lined with sweet grace breath holds a tumbling stare reflects my wonder

This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne Duval Morgan On Date: 2004-09-17 09:22:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Ezahl, I havn't been able to critique but one poem, however on God's earth whick you reference so beautifully in honorable venacular in this poem, I have to say you touched a cord to my soul, yes, a lake's reflection is the mirror of reflection in what the creator created, You poem three lines is so apt in the reflection of the tranquility of his creation. I'm sorry you weere unable to buy credits, I followed Aunty and decided to try and purchase some, to no avail. hris evidently is letting those that retained credits time to use them, but he has been non-responsive in other areas also. I posted to the initial column posted by those that want to comment on the site. There hasn't been any posting by me, so the Lady that lost her Mother doesn't know others identify with her so readily. It's sad, I feel as if I'm going to lose touch with the many I've come to love and admire. I know I'' miss your poetry and bothers me, so if you could indicate how best I can read your poetry I would sorely appreciate it. Meaningful, and in language to make intent know, an followed through but words as succinct as any every read. Good luck to you I shall miss you...but keep writing your words are poetry. Jo (joanne) (Mo) Morgan (often mistaken for Aunty)

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