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This Poem was Submitted By: Ms.Kim Shumaker On Date: 2004-09-18 11:36:46 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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The Man In The Window

The man in the window sitting with his back strong and straight Could he be reading or meditating upon the Word or simply resting after a long day in his shop? Young and brilliant he appears and as we stroll by he gives us an upward nod of his head. For a moment I am reminded of a story Mother told me when I was a child, Mother’s story was taught to her by her mother from the book of Truth’s and it went something like this, Be kind to all people for someday in some special way, You might unknowingly be entertaining an angel. Was the man in the window heaven sent, after all He gives joy to all who enters his shop, Whether you are browsing or making a purchase His kindness and sincerity makes people feel lovely and special Whether at the local grocer or in his store, The next time he walks up give him a smile and an upward nod of your head he too needs a friendly face and should you stop in at his shop to purchase a new bed as newly weds, Think about the story of an angel and ask with a sincere heart How are you this lovely day before he fades away. Yes, I too Believe there are angels among us—don’t you ?

Additional Notes:
This poem is also being published with Creative Communications and has been reviewed by Mr. Duane Allen for possible song. I am an emotional girl who too writes about life as I see it.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Latorial D. Faison On Date: 2004-10-03 21:09:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Kim, Thanks for sharing your sentiments of poetry at TPL this month. I enjoyed reading it. It actually reminded me of a lot of the things that my grandmother used to say. I call them "truisms" (smile). I think that the title is very appropriate, and it reads like a charm. It reads like prose, so I'll call it a prose poem; however, you could do all sorts of things with the lines. But that depends on what kind of structure you would like it to carry. When I'm writing poems, sometimes I write them in different formats (lines and stanzas) just to see if it will have an effect on how they are read, how the thoughts transition from one to the next. I think you definitely have a story here, and I would go with prose (paragraph style). You have a storyteller's spirit which shines through in this selection. Keep on writing, and I enjoyed reading this selection tremendously. Latorial www.latorial.com

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2004-09-21 17:34:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.33333
poet this is so lovely and yes, I so believe in angels......have had armies of them by my side at times some easy times, some hard times.....but they are always there to carry us through the bad times.....I laid dying once and in the life flight the angels were with me and the feeling of peace that surrounded me allowing me to know it would be alright.....two months later I returned home.....being an emotional girl I am sure you would enjoy knowing I felt the breath of God as He kissed my cheek....and poet there is no greater feeling of love then His.....I am so thankful that you posted this for me to find.....and I am sure it will touch the heart of all that come to read it as well......good structure, great word flow and images well poet that goes without saying.....God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Wanda S. Thibodeaux On Date: 2004-09-19 10:28:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.87500
Dear Ms.Kim Shumaker: This is a wonderful thought for a song. Your words are sincere, and filled with passionate belief. I too understand the story your mother told, I was taught in the same way. I also believe there are angels among us, that kindness to one another is essential to our own relationship with G-d. This poem so gently conveys that message, I am truly touched. The only change I can suggest is the shortening of some of the lines to make it easier to read, the words themselves are superlative. Emotion about life gives us something to live for. I hope all your plans work out for this piece. It is deserving of recognition. Best of luck, Wanda

This Poem was Critiqued By: James Edward Schanne On Date: 2004-09-18 22:44:57
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.20513
This poem reminds me of a book I read by a philosopher named Motermer adler who died in 2001, the book was called how to think about angels, He drew many parallels between thoughts of angels and subatomic particles,not they were alike in reality but that how we know of their reality. That is that their inferred, one from our limits of the knowledge of matter and one from our limits of the knowledge spirit. The conclusion being that one makes no less sense than the other. So angels for me are very much a matter of the way the world really is, Thanks for letting me read and comment.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Sandra J Kelley On Date: 2004-09-18 22:06:00
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.50000
Kim, what a lovely message in your poem. I would concider reformating it so that it fits better on the page maybe just shorten the really long lines or type them as two lines. This would make a nice song but be sure to check out this publisher very thouroughly. Good luck Sandra

This Poem was Critiqued By: Robert Wyma On Date: 2004-09-18 16:18:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
The joy in poetry for me is the bravery that emerges in writing honestly. You convey this poem with honesty, and passion. The question remains, are those chance encounters chance, or is something special sent unseen. In this world of crazy busy-ness we often miss much that would change us, if we could just slow down, smile, be kind, and share the good parts we all have. This is the second poem I have read today that speaks to the incredible pace our modern lives have, and how much we have but do not always appreciate. You have presented this idea very well, and in a story that enlivens the question. Well done. Thanks for sharing Robert

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