This Poem was Submitted By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2004-11-11 12:30:25 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Sail

the wind has always been blowing ever on it blows, it flows, from low to high upon and those who sail and those who drift a-sea those who will, know how much it can lift but the free a sailor, keel proud can see in his vision the wind's caprice shroud a force that awaits his precision tawny sailor, skin browned now water at his feet, he's made his decision dawning sailor, head crowned a mist he would meet steady on ever northern, compass bound stern as his fleet steady on ready on the rudder into morning's Avalon steady on he sweeps buoyed by the Mother the wind has always been blowing ever on it blows, it flows, from low to high upon
Copyright © November 2004 Regis L Chapman

Additional Notes:
I am on a 'wind' kick right now. I have a lot of breezes blowing through me now.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2004-11-28 17:40:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.80000
Hi Regis, This one blew to me. I feel like I've sailed off on a day trip. The wind is our fate. The boat the person.. I like the refrain; the wind has always been blowing ever on it blows, it flows, from low to high upon This is so. From low to high upon. Tis better to be the master/captain of your ship and make decisions as to your voyage and destination. Than to be adrift at sea. Good thoughtful poem. You blew me away... I'm blown outta here. Dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2004-11-16 16:18:23
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Regis, The only thing I hate about Mother nature is her wind! The sad part about that is I live where the wind does blow...not every day but when it gets its ire up it blows so hard that not much is left standing verticle. Having said that I must admit I was taken with this poem. I like the rhyme and the musical sound of the words that flow easy from one line to the next....'it blows, it flows, from low to high upon'..the repetition of this line is very effective and give balance to all the lines....'wind's caprice shroud' is a great line...'tawny sailor, skin browned'..love this line..I use tawny a lot as it is one of my favorite colors to use in writing. The next time the wind blows here I will remember this poem and that will make it easier to bear! Peace...Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2004-11-11 20:41:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
A salty piece that pleases me, blowing ever on it blows, it flows - from the aft quarter I have often mused on this thought, where has it come from and what does it carry with it, the wind, my "kin", well said. In stanza 2 I smiled and felt the sailor, who has chosen to be there, who knows the ocean, for good and for bad, a sailor, keel proud can see in his vision the wind's caprice shroud - whose has vision for only the sea. This is a vision, which you have, without saying directly, often is a mystery to those who have not captured it. Well said, a truly nautical insight. stern as his fleet steady on ready on the rudder into morning's Avalon - Here again, ready on the rudder, and I got the feeling that you almost personified the rudder as the sailor, who directs his will with the waves. Finally, yielding to the the magic of the "mother", that ocean alive in his soul. As a sailor you ended it well as you began - blowing ever on it blows and the sailor sails on. A splendid piece!!
This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2004-11-11 18:55:42
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
The wind is blowing through you? Better get some Saran wrap and glue! Better hope there isn't a 'noreastern a blowin'. Not often do poets end poems well. You have done so by repition of the first stanza which stands well. I can hear Stan Rogers sing this one. Too bad he's dead. Nice work. Good flow and ease of reading. Sail on Master, sail on.
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