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Norsemen of Antiquity Finding oneself adrift upon the open seas No anchor to hold steadfast no sail to maintain a course In the depths below unsolved mysteries In the heaven above eternal light bestowed The current moves this vessel forward Towards a destination uncharted yet predetermined Music from the waters passing the sirens of mythology Eyes are closed and forward momentum gained Yonder a shoreline abruptly the ship rests Upon an outer sand bar giving hope for a new adventure Now upon land traveling towards the east Again the sea is reached forcing a directional shift Venturing north, south same result Land mass surrounded by the oceans allure Rock formation abound silhouettes form Algae lay upon the surface resembling a blanket covering The largest shape appears as if a cape is worn One that may have been discarded by Neptune himself Now shadows form as clouds play peek-a-boo with the sun Coolness prevails Darkness is now seen in the midday moments Sense a storm approaching with its full force Thoughts now shift to focus on the land Barren, no fruit life withdrawn Question arise Return once again to the ship Remain upon the land What is best? To return to the ship an endless journey To remain on land to be swallowed by the surge Decision made….once again adrift…. |
Additional Notes:
What prompted this write were several things. One was a college assignment my son was taking regarding the Vikings. A section of the report included the poet that traveled with the ship to write about the experiences for it was seen as good luck to have one aboard. Realizing my maternal ancestry includes Norway and Denmark I thought I would include a script about life and how it continues on even after the Viking has fanished in body, yet in legends and thoughts they continue on. Look deep into this one for life is the adventure and the experience eternal...
This Poem was Critiqued By: Jennifer j Hill On Date: 2005-01-06 21:49:30
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Tom,
So good to see your work here again.
This has been a crazy busy month for me and I feel bad because I
had such good intentions for critiquing this month and just didn't get
it done and now I'm running out of time. So this will have to be short
but meaningful.
I have read and reread this poem because I enjoy it so much. Each time
I try to critique it I end up having to wait because I want to say more
then I have time to write. So I guess I'll just tell you what I like
about it. Everything...well, for instance the title is very magnetic.
Drew me right in. Not to mention the first part of
"Finding oneself adrift
upon the open seas
No anchor to hold steadfast
no sail to maintain a course"
I love this because it reminds me so much of life. You can plot a course, but
in the end you'll be adrift without sail. An adventure for sure!
Where will it lead. Only the current and maybe the wind can tell you.
But one things for sure whether you stay adrift or land somewhere and stay awhile
there will be lessons to learn and take with you and it all adds up to life.
You can either roll with the waves and enjoy it or fight it every step of the
way and come up with nothing at the end. I think in essense that is what you're
saying here in a most enjoyable way.
Thanks for blessing TPL with this gift at such an appropriate time of year.
Best,
Jennifer