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This Poem was Submitted By: Erzahl Leo M. Espino On Date: 2004-12-23 00:46:06 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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verse 35 (Manger) - revisited

In that borrowed crib God offered His precious gift Wrapped in swaddling clothes

Additional Notes:
Jesus - God's love and humbleness revealed. Merry Christmas to all! Peace!

This Poem was Critiqued By: Jennifer j Hill On Date: 2005-01-06 22:30:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Erzahl, Thank you for this reposting of such a lovely Christmas Japanese verse. It means so much to me to be able to read this short message of hope and know that the gift is for everyone including me. The most prescious of all gifts. I love how you used borrowed, gift and wrapping to tie this wonderous explanation of the first ever Christmas gift all together in such a neat little package. Blessings, Jennifer

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2004-12-29 16:35:01
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Erzahl, such a spiritual sentiment in this verse. One may believe or not, but the warmth of your verse certainly adds a level of spiritual goodness to a holiday gone wild. In that borrowed crib - A borrowed crib is more than in keeping with the theme. Borrowed is indicative, as well of the humanity that Christ shared, till his resurrection. You might say, from his conception, he borrowed of that crib, for an end that would redeem the world. A splendid metaphor within the first line. God offered His precious gift - One might be led, theologically to question the validity of the story, however, whether faith is spawned or not, if the story is true and accessible, then the gift is without a doubt precious. Some might say that the gift is his son, but I believe his son is the vehicle. For one who has been forgiven, when forgiveness was tantamount to living, his precious gift is that altruistic forgiveness. Given, paid for, allowed, it all means, one can smile once more before God. Wrapped in swaddling clothes - Here then is the crux of the story, that the "omnipotent" allowed himself to be subservient to man, to his parents, to a punishment not due, and it all became clear, in swaddling cloths. There, most helpless of all infants, a human, there, the omnipotent, God, borrowed humanity, that he might redeem it. Wonderful verse, well illustrated!!

This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne Duval Morgan On Date: 2004-12-29 00:49:25
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
The creche (crib, yes, the manger, stark beginning, but a most beautiful part of the meaning of Christmas, three lines that say more then longer poems, and fitting to a commeration on the birth of Christ. Yes my friend the poem stands as a tribute to the birth of Christ, not one day goes by whatout Christ in it, and I give thanks for this meaning of Christmas. All my best.........Jo Mo

This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2004-12-24 21:26:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.93750
Erzahl--Definitely more than seasonal: very time appropriate (an understatement-smile) and hopefully will again remind most of us of the real reason for celebrating the 25th of December. Since the entire "Manger" event was ordained, humanity as we know it has been allowed to carry on. Another of your terse messages, however, this one purposely conveys the essence of a 'special' birthdate. Thanks for posting such a read and, the best to you and yours during the holidays. TLW

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2004-12-23 12:03:15
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.88235
Hi Erzahl, When I read this poem I said to myself...that says it all...no more words are needed to convey the reason for Christmas...just lovely. In fact the words really touch me and I am sure will do the same for all that read it. It will be on my list and no doubt many others, as well. Have a blessed Christmas and an outstanding New Year! Peace and comfort to you and your family. Marilyn

This Poem was Critiqued By: Sherri L Smith On Date: 2004-12-23 10:13:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Dear Erzahl, I just couldn't resist taking a peek at some of the poetry of some of my dear friends. I may be absent but my friends not forgotten. Of course, you are the haiku artist and this one is wonderful as usual. Happy Holidays, Sherri Smith

This Poem was Critiqued By: James Edward Schanne On Date: 2004-12-23 06:51:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.75000
proud parents smile was that a donkey in prayer? God renewed in flesh You know I like to give my own take, Thanks for letting me read and contemplate yours

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