Poetry Contests Online at The Poetic Link

This Poem was Submitted By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2005-05-08 19:36:57 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!

Click Here To add this poem to your "Voting Possibilities" list!

Cinquain

Touching Lips together Soft as flower petals Testament of our lasting love Lives on

This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2005-06-03 13:46:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.86486
Marilyn, You do these quite nicely using the 22 syllables you make me want to try and do it also even though I tend to write free form. I see sweetness and caring for one another in this piece more than just love. You give the reader the sense of softness by the use of the petals touching. This piece is pleasurable and smooth to read. You show both the physical and thoughtful side to love in this piece. Another well done poem. Thanks, Thomas

This Poem was Critiqued By: Troy D Skroch On Date: 2005-05-22 20:52:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Marilyn, Hmm..., what a nice kiss. LOL! Sorry, I'm laughing only because we so seldom see a kiss like this on TV today. It's more of a savage, erotic, lustful lip smacking. I think your word choices capture a real love kiss instead of the other, making this more powerful and meaningful in a poetic sense. Very nice and tastefully done. I have to go looking for some of your longer poems. Troy

This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2005-05-22 00:08:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.85185
HI Marilyn, A Cinquain - 2,4,6,8,2. I'm going to try my hand at this form very shortly. You've captured a very 'large' emotion like love in just 14 words and have done a very fine job in doing so. I believe this was written in memory and homor of your beloved husband. The poem is rich with the depth of this love and the image of the 'lips together, soft as flower petals', gives this poem a very delicate, soft, inncoent and genuine feel. Very well-written Marilyn, Take care, Duane.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2005-05-11 15:40:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.85714
Cinquain, true to form, touching........what a lovely way to begin, lips together........best way to kiss..... soft as flower petals, beutifully said and one can feel the softness associated with it.... Testament of our lasting love..........lives on....... When we stop and take a look at our world and those around us, children, grandchildren, etc., indeed a grand testament to a love of a lifetime.......and to think it all started with a touch and a gentle kiss. Thanks for posting, sharing with us your talents......God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2005-05-10 16:40:02
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Marilyn, Cinquain [I looked up description/to see] line 1 - one word (noun) a title or name of the subject line 2 - two words (adjectives) describing the title line 3 - three words (verbs) describing an action related to the title line 4 - four words describing a feeling about the titlem, a complete sentence line 5 - one word referring back to the title of the poem line 5 should be one 2 syllable word like 'forever' [an example/but I'm no expert!] It looks like you did very well. Your poems so romantic. It sounds like you and that fellow I'm jealous of. I lovvvvvvvvvvve soft petal kisses, oh my! This is a testement............always. It's wonderful to relive the moments over and over....be still my heart. Nice Marilyn, he does live on......... Hugs, Dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: Rachel F. Spinoza On Date: 2005-05-09 08:04:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Cinquain Touching Lips together Soft as flower petals Testament of our lasting love Lives on Reading this testament; this gospel of your love written with sweet intensity charms me

This Poem was Critiqued By: Audrey R Donegan On Date: 2005-05-09 00:39:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
Perfectly structured. A true ode to love's power and beauty. Your last line 'lives on' is a wonderful ending to an emotion that doesn't. Very well done Marilyn. Thanks for posting, Audrey

Poetry Contests Online at The Poetic Link

Click HERE to return to ThePoeticLink.com Database Page!