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Cursed Wrapped thought around my mind warp and torture till concluded. I analyze, criticize, and am mesmerized by the process of decisive thinking. The pros, the cons are both unsatisfactory. One more, next less, neither best. My future, my very breath at stake yet still I hesitate and vacillate. Momentarily thinking this, later that. Mayhap better, possibly worse, I am, most obviously cursed. Change is transition from today. I wished I'd run away, yesterday. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Nancy Ann Hemsworth On Date: 2005-06-05 18:35:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.78261
This is so very true of most of us isn't it? Fear the great factor in this I feel. Afraid of change, of taking that step of making that choice, and there we sit, and only dream our dreams, to afraid to life them or make that first step.
I love the way you used the inline rhyming through your poem, made it read so fluidly. examples of this are "criticize, and am mesmerized"..."I hesitate and vacillate."...and again "away, yesterday". and with all this your poem or rhymes never seemed forced or a word used just to fit. Very intelligent writing here Dellena, I enjoyed this very much.
Nancy