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This Poem was Submitted By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2005-05-22 16:16:08 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Two Souls

Two souls join in language of love, trust, and passion melding together forming a bold bond

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-06-06 22:20:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.71429
While brief, a great statement, a pronouncement, a commitment, of strength. Thank you for sharing.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2005-06-03 07:46:05
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.93939
Marilyn, Like the message and at the same time keeping this in the pattern that you have selected. Your beginning and ending sums up the heart of your poem. Your use of two souls melding together includes all aspects and emotions molding into one. I see a 2,4,6,8,2 syllable poem. Well done and thanks for showing me another aspect of the trade. Thomas

This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne M Uppendahl On Date: 2005-05-25 13:47:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
mt: I had to tumble down to the bottom of my page to find you, but -- oh, how worthwhile is the tumbling!;) It's lovely in every way. I need to catch up with myself for a moment. LOL! This is exquisite: Two souls join in language of love, trust, and passion melding together forming a bold bond You show how language is much more than words -- how two souls exchange much more than words, as physical and emotional expression transform both to spiritual heights. But you have said it much better! I love romantic poetry and this is a sublime example of it, as well as of your gifted versatility. It's going to be a very difficult month for voting! There are so many truly outstanding poems this month - and this is one of them. Brief, intense -- the cadence perfect for the sweet dance of these two souls. It lacks nothing. It holds everything of the sense of "love, trust, and passion" reflected by you, so reverently here. Brava! A bouquet of tiger lilies, tossed... My best always, Joanne

This Poem was Critiqued By: Troy D Skroch On Date: 2005-05-22 20:45:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Marilyn, Hi again. I have been kind of scarce this month and am trying to catch up. Hey, this is one of those pieces I can't name, but boy are you getting good at it =) First, I think you are right with your title. That is where love should be, on the soul level. I think that your lines wrap into each other brilliantly. "Two souls - join" / "language - of love" / "passion - melding" / "a - bold bond" "bold bond" I can sure empathize with this poem. Very efficient, great word choices and communicates inclusively. Nice. I hope you are doing well in Wyoming, Troy

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2005-05-22 20:07:11
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.85106
Two Souls...........the title alone offers so much poet, the thought of two souls leaving God's Heavenly Garden at separate times, places, spaces perhaps.......and coming together in life here on earth.......meeting, falling in love, joining together in the presence of God, family and friends, words exchanged which they hold forever within the lining of their hearts for life and back to eternity when both souls will someday reunite in union.......enjoyed the structure and form .........a lovely read, so full of life, passion, trust and understanding, you touch on the good, the sadness, life in its entirety that these two souls have shared.......how deeply you must have loved this man my friend and he you........your memories are well kept .....thank you for posting and sharing with us......God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2005-05-22 19:05:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.87097
HI Marilyn, Another fine Cinquain that has a big heart. The message of love, trust and passion between the two souls resonates energetically from this piece and I beleive that this too, is written in honor of the love shared between your husband and yourself. 'Bold bond' - nice alliteration and a firm ending to a piece giving the reader a sense of how unshakable the bond is. Wonderful job done again!! Take Care, Duane.

This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2005-05-22 18:43:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.30769
Bold bond all right. Like who knows if it will last. That's a chance one takes. Love ain't all there is but it sure helps. What the hell is a soul anyway? I think it's a man made up thing! So, is that enough for a union of two? No! No wonder there are so many divorces~short, and to the (almost) point with a title that is repeated in the first line...couldn't you think of something else? I am of the viewpoint that the title should not be a give away. Keep 'er coming.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2005-05-22 17:00:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90909
Marilyn, A formidable bond to be sure. The communion of lovers trusting melding being bonded is the ultimate of all ultimates. Simply the best, again you are so blessed. And his memory will always be alive in you. Another blessing. And you share the joy with those who know you.. How simply glorious! Good job sugar..... dellena

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