This Poem was Submitted By: Joyce P. Hale On Date: 2005-07-10 11:04:28 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Haiku on Midsummer

Midsummer nights are magic spirits are rampant searching for unwary souls.....

Copyright © July 2005 Joyce P. Hale

Additional Notes:
I love haiku! It allows one the chance to draw pictures for others in few words - succinct and precise.


This Poem was Critiqued By: Latorial D. Faison On Date: 2005-08-06 22:49:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.78571
Very good haiku Joyce. And you have chosen just the right "few" words to leave a lasting impression on readers of this short poem. Midsummer and magic are the standout words in line one. Those m sounds are captivating and stand as poetic justice creating this poem and setting the tone. spirits are rampant . . . this line brings a vivid picture to mind, and the third line personifies these spirits and just leave the reader grasping for more or just pondering on a profound thought. Great job. Thanks for sharing. Latorial www.latorialfaison.com


This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2005-07-31 11:01:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.84000
I hope my soul isn't "unwary" especially on those midsummer nights when I hear the wolves howling, and the cyotes baying. Yes they are magic as I watch the night sky over the ocean, and see the space station...I begin to wonder... Thanks for the Haiku. It is well done.
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2005-07-15 15:30:43
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.82353
Hi Joyce, I love hiaku too! Instead of being restrictive I find it an easy path to limn emotions, sounds, smells, and touch. One just needs to open their mind when reading a good haiku to see all the thoughts not written. midusmmer nights are magic.....this is a lovely phrase and to anyone that has breathed in the magic of a midsummer night the words are delicious. spirits are rampant.....the mystic of a summer night...so many sights and sounds...owls, crickets, flowing water, light zephyrs that play with our hair. searching for unwary souls.....(I may have used playful souls here) unwary souls has sort of a creepy feel to it...but then that is just me and please ingnore my tinkering with this beautiful haiku! Well done...good form and wonderful images. Blessings...Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2005-07-13 13:38:02
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Joyce--Excellent representation of mainly Western Haiku (7-5-6) as oppose to Japanese Verse (5-7-5). The imagery is metaphoric and personified. Much said and presented in this eighteen syllable nocturnal scene. Thanks. TLW
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rebecca B. Whited On Date: 2005-07-11 12:23:54
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Joyce, In 17 syllables, you have created a magical image of midsummer nights. You have named a season [summer] and given the reader an insight into the magic of summer spirits as they search for unwary souls to frolick, enjoy the pleasures of summer nights. While traditionally Haiku is in 5-7-5 line syllable counts, and the season is not named, I find myself caught up in the poet's use of her poetic license to create an image of pleasure. Nice read, I enjoyed, Beck
This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2005-07-11 08:49:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Joyce! Precisely. Haikus stretch the imagination and when written well and thoughtfully, compact an ocean of wealth to perfection even within its metrical limitations. I love haiku too!! You have done a commendable job in presenting this as the aural, free piece that this is and you have chosen the setting of a midsummer night to bring your theme to dance before your readers senses. There is a presence of magic, liberal spirits rampantly gracing their stage and a search for/ seeking out of unsuspecting souls. Unwary souls also indirectly refers to how overcome people are at this time of day..completely drenched in the magic. True to its 7-5-7 beat, this haiku makes an impact and one will have to admit, it isn't easy fitting an ocean into a pond. Well done. Take care, Duane.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-07-10 22:15:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.81250
Joyce, By chance are you a patron of "Midsummer's Night Dream", this instantly brought that to mind, always enjoyed it....loved watching the dancers. Anyway.... Midsummer nights are magic {there is always magic in the air at night during midsummer, something about the balminess of the air, enchanted leaving ones mind to take flights of fancy} spirits are rampant {indeed, they are everywhere especially to the unsuspecting, mischife is definitely a foot} searching for unwary souls { a what else would we expect rampant spirits to do, however alesson might be that under the spell of the midsummers night one is off guard and easy prey." I do not know enough about haiku to say much more than a nice read. Thank you. Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2005-07-10 16:58:29
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.85714
And create a picture you have poet.....and welcome to the Poetic Link..........I believe this is the first of your work I have read.....Haiku.....many are gifted with their creations in such form.....this one reads very well, has the 5-7-5 meter and does allow for much to be presented in three little lines........I do so enjoy the summer and nights are probably the best for a number of reasons......sometimes we go fishing and catch a good batch of pout, sometimes I just sit and listen to the gentle rain fall as it hits the tin on the roof .....sometimes I watch the fireflies and listen to the frogs on a really warm midsummer night and wonder how God created so much for us to enjoy for so little..........again, thank you for posting and sharing your talent with us...looking forward to more of your work. God Bless, Claire
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