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It Is Not Their Place The angels are watching The demons devour The squandered existence Of spiritless men It is not their place To divinely intervene Where grace is refused And faith is unknown The angels are listening To the demons howl As they consume the vitality Of those who turned away It is not their place To save the ungrateful Who chose not the Father But the fallen dark prince The angels are smelling The demons foul stench As they ravage the essence Of the eternally lost It is not their place To sacredly interrupt The descent of lives That ignored His calling The angels are feeling The demons disembowel The souls of His children Who are damned forever It is not their place To mercifully rescue The unrighteous ones Who scorned His touch |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-11-03 14:18:41
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.93617
Medard,
It Is Not Their Place [Very apt title}
The angels are watching
The demons devour
The squandered existence
Of spiritless men
It is not their place
To divinely intervene
Where grace is refused
And faith is unknown [yes]
The angels are listening
To the demons howl
As they consume the vitality
Of those who turned away
It is not their place
To save the ungrateful
Who chose not the Father
But the fallen dark prince [listen as they always do, amen]
The angels are smelling
The demons foul stench
As they ravage the essence
Of the eternally lost
It is not their place
To sacredly interrupt
The descent of lives
That ignored His calling [as it should be]
The angels are feeling
The demons disembowel
The souls of His children
Who are damned forever
It is not their place
To mercifully rescue
The unrighteous ones
Who scorned His touch [truth can not be hidden no matter how we may no like it]
This is simply spectacular, eloquent, poignant and beautiful not only it it’s structure and flow but in the message you have delivered. Addressing each sense you follow through describing what is happening in terms relating to that sense. I found that after each paragraph I wanted to say “Amen”, it reads like a prayer, like a song, a sad soul lament. You have delivered up all the truth of your belief in simply uncomplicated terms, no room for doubt it is quite plain and simply. It is not their place, man has been given every opportunity to make a choice here and you have clearly shown the outcome of poor choices. Love your verbiage and the way you've used it. Thank you so much for this wondrous read, a very accomplished piece bravo! Kudos my friend!
As always,
Lora