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This Poem was Submitted By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2005-11-07 06:10:58 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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A Dream Realized

Landlocked? Sea’s in both hearts: the sweet dream 'placed on hold’ for unity of family, sail on!

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For JJH; all is fine, thanks for caring-smile. TLW

This Poem was Critiqued By: Moira Grace Hamel-Smith On Date: 2010-02-07 05:37:59
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
The title seems to contradict the the 3rd line.Can a dream be both realized and " 'placed on hold" ? Sounds more like a dream abandoned for duty.Who gets to sail on? Who is landlocked? Sounds like a heart in irons.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Elaine Marie Phalen On Date: 2005-12-04 10:36:15
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Sometimes we must give up one aspect of our lives in order to sustain something even more important. This cinquain speaks of a person who's temporarily chosen to give up the sea and work-live-plan on land. L2, however, suggests that the spouse or companion shares the speaker's love of sailing and that, were circumstances otherwise, both would remain on the water. This gives a certain hope for the future. But current concerns have clearly intervened and the sea, now a faint hum in the ear, will return only when there's time for her call to be heeded. "Unity of family" forces us to make tough choices sometimes, doesn't it? I can relate to this one, Turner. I've deferred some dreams, too. A few I managed to recapture and others, well, I guess they're gone for good. An honest poem, and it's easy to empathize with the speaker. Take Care, Brenda

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2005-11-30 09:42:13
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.15789
Turner, Intriguing short poem. I love that idea of the sea being in the heart, and the touch of "both hearts." Indeed, we are always at sea. Or so it seems. Mark

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2005-11-25 16:59:03
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.82609
Hi Turner, I don't how I missed this poem...in fact I seem to have missed everythiing you have written lately. I am in a dither getting ready for xams...so many to buy for, wrap and mail, then I am leaving on Dec. 19th for Ft Worth to spend xmas with my daughter and her family. Having said all of that...I love this piece..you are becoming a master at writing these little gems. Your favorite topic...the sea...you do so well here. I know you are land locked and that has to be a sorrow now and then....'sweet dream place on hold...yes perhaps in the not too distant future you can take trip to the sea! Love your last line...sail on...very fitting here. Well done...love this one. Peace...Marilyn

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2005-11-12 13:30:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.83333
Turner, I would like to say I have some idea what this is about, but I can only write to what is means to me. And besides, you have included my greatest love, the sea!! Can I then not speak to it? I think NOT. A Dream Realized – I have had so many dreams, and not a lot of them realized, at least not the dreams which matter least. I can grant this title its due!! Landlocked?- Now, you hit me here. I have been for several years, and looking at the ocean has not done it for me. You could not have gotten my attention any faster. Here, for me, is a sad first line!! Sea’s in both hearts: - When one shares the “sea” with another, it gathers such immensity that the love can grant both a common bond. What I see in this line are “hearts” big as the ocean, sharing. the sweet dream 'placed on hold’ for unity of family, – I have a constant understanding of this line, in fact, there are so many dreams fulfilled for family, that the dreams put aside sometimes quake for release. sail on! – Take me with you, for as you speak here, my heart “sails on” and the next shore is carried on the next dream, or vice versa. Turner a stirring piece, at least for me, maybe others may not grasp it to them as I do, but there is too much here, for me not to smile and dream.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-11-08 19:19:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Turner, Your count is right on for this delicious cinquain. I have had to read it several times, while I like the sound of the words, thinking it would end more upbeat I felt a sadness that something must be placed on hold, however, I guess that if it is by choice of those involved and not forced, then all is as it should be. I will have to read and ponder this some more. Thank you for the mental exercise, *smile*. As Always, Lora

This Poem was Critiqued By: Jennifer j Hill On Date: 2005-11-08 08:59:04
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Turner, I logged on to see the results of the contest and got the most lovely surprise! Your title couldn't be more true. We traded a small dream for a more important dream. Now that is a fair trade. LOL, landlocked indeed! People have always said "Where do you sail?" because we live in the midwest, but we never let that slight little problem bother us with all the lakes around. But now we are truly landlocked. I love this form, although I can't remember what it is. It's short, sweet and to the point. I like how you start with a question and end in exclaimation. And yes 'sail on' through life is exactly what we'll do. And it does just fly by, doesn't it? Glad to hear all is fine. And your muse is still intact of course! Thanks for this one, Turner. It's a keeper.

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