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Oasis There is sand, so sore, out there too abundant, out there, where the rain is wasted ‘til the day it greets us, under these palms... ...over here is the deep oasis, come berth your ship, and step inside. We’ve watered the earth’s poorest souls since nineteen forty five. That's the beauty of this oasis, all the things you can see, and clear: the desert, under the desert moon, is finally beautiful here... ...still, I nightly call to my brother with the camel that clouds his eye: ‘Come in to the deep oasis, come. Come in, and you’ll be fine.’ |
This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2005-11-30 16:12:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.71429
Before I forget - I don't think you were around at the time I wrote "dinky-di". Look for it. I think you will enjoy it.
Okay, back to your poem. There is ever the mystery surrounding this. Water, is the staff of life (next comes bread). Without water we die in 10 days or so. The sand is sore, it's hot and the oasis provides nourishment. And hopefully the palms bear dates. They mystery of 1945 leaps out. The end of WW2? The N.African campaign was fought in the desert. Did your brother die there?
This is kinda haunting my friend. Wish I had more info.