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Unfreezing December I may let my precious moments elapse And let my golden days pass I may let the reminiscing memories dash Yet I don't have the heart to forget Christmas. Christmas comes like a dawn A feeling of freshness is blown Like the whisper of the morning breeze As it coolly touches my skin It gives a sensation I'm always dreamin'. At night when it's cloudy in the heavens The twinkling stars may not be seen Yet colorful series lights and lantern Offer me a wonderful gaze even it rains. People nod, smile and pause Greetings are exchanged ubiquitous Be it in a letter or in a voice Profound message of love is my best choice. Gift abounds... Love surrounds... Festive celebration seems without bound In my life it reverberates a joyful sound. Sorrows, problems, tears vanish Kisses, cares, laughter flourish Embracing the time to share and give The time to get-together, love and forgive. All dream sprouts and starts to burgeon To the zenith or beyond the horizon More than a wish, a smell of sweet perfume In this Yuletide season. Every hope glows and pours a scent of myrrh Every heart, every mind sets astir The fragrance of love is beyond compare In this unfreezing December. Come and rejoice, join the angels sing As the carol begins to ring To Him we dance and cling Laud the Lord Christ the King. |
Additional Notes:
Happy Holidays to everyone!
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2006-01-03 08:02:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.20000
Enjoyable piece and reflection on the season. I have a minor suggestion and that deals with structure. Throughout your piece you kept this in a four line pattern except for the second stanza where there are five lines. Although it doesn't take away from your presentation it does effect flow and structure. Just a thought. Like how you start this off saying you can not forget Christmas for it is imbedded within. Your use of words like fragrance of love, golden days pass, embracing the time to share are my favorite parts. Thanks for sharing.