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Thou Wannabe How now this prancing life-or-death concern of yours? No fleck of spent metal from your fly-wheel’s a cudgel you can bludgeon your wars into an heirloom with. All's well and good if you can trick slick melancholy into a classic, but a bluff decline in taste, predictable in full before your pen begins its fatal journey, reifies stuffiness: fluffied up into form, it still gives our heads no rest. How irony makes you buy mistake: how one suck on Shakespeare's dugs sparks a blue fury for teeth to chew through to a poem with - gosh - with what? Slobber? Son, you’d be lucky exceeding to bloody your gums with a toothpick. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2006-02-07 06:21:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.57143
Another poem that is difficult for this reader to swallow. It felt as if it had to much fluff at least for this reader. I really like the way you format your poems yet the depth is to much for me to handle for I lose the point in reading it. Like the part about the pen begins it fatal journey, melancholy into a classic another well thought out line. Just some thoughts from this reader.