This Poem was Submitted By: Nancy Ann Hemsworth On Date: 2006-03-10 22:18:28 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Along The Fence

Pink lupin peeks among the posts Of worn gray fence, propped up against The backdrop of an azure sky,  And all along this packed dirt path Wild carrot’s sewn, top soft green grass Daintily placed, like antique lace, Hand stitched on grandma's pillow case.

Copyright © March 2006 Nancy Ann Hemsworth


This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2006-04-01 18:23:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.70588
Nancy, I have a picture on my wall of flowers on a worn gray fence, so this was a poetic picture of it. Mine has delphiniums, marigolds,daisies, coreopsis, glads, and more... I LOVE FLOWERS. Loved your poem! The lace touch nice-homey-family love. A hand stitched poem.... Dellena


This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2006-03-12 10:50:29
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Nancy Ann, What a wonderful remembrance, how I've forgotten embroidered pillow cases. Avery discriptive visual of a time when life was a bit slower, pride in accomplishment was valued, and Grandma's sewing was an heirloom. You gave me pause to think of the few treasured items I've tucked away in the cedar chest. I wonder if the next generation will even know what embroidery or hand sewing as an art, means. One suggestion, IMOH I'd remove the capitals that you begin each sentence with, they can tend to stilt the reading. Never the less, I enjoyed this poem. Best always, Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2006-03-11 15:59:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.40000
Delicate story stitched into this piece. And well crafted. Unfortunately I had to re-read it too many times because of the font you chose. Old(er)people like myself are probably the cause. But with Easter approaching this makes for a neat story. Hand stitching like grandma's is probably a lost art for everyone in her day knew how to do it. Me? I can hardly darn a sock! I hope that pink bunny finds a similar mate! Well done in the space you gave it.
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2006-03-11 11:36:07
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Nancy, This poem really speaks to me as I love to write about nature. Even though this poem is terse (something I like) you are able to engage the reader and put them standing by the fence. I love your word choices...worn gray fence...azure sky...wild carrot's sewn, (love this ) top soft green grass. daintily placed, like antique lace.....all of these descriptors are stunning and the last stanza is wonderful. I suppose to be a good critiquer I should give you some suggestions for improvement...however, I can't think of any and feel that this piece is professional as it stands. Well done. Best...Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2006-03-11 08:06:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.75000
You give the reader a picture of the scene while traveling this dirt path and relate it to memories of your grandmas's pillow case in a very artistic and well flowing poem. You move easily into the last two lines making this a joy to read. Hope to see some of your Haiku again if I remember correctly. Wish a few more that write this way would show their work again. Thanks for sharing.
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