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Daydream I become the woods. Moss robes my shoulders, my branches exhale. Blackbirds walk my grassy back. I am emerald blades beneath their feet. As soil, I sense the quivering of worms, tunnel with them in glad clay, relish its moist black depths, suffer coats of gravel, revel in road’s surprise. As wind, I soar through dense green towards sun flung orbs. I learn to tremble with lake’s yearning for my lucid fingerling streams, feel wisps of fog caress my banks. As a cloud, I drop my face to lap at my likeness in water. As the Moon, I glimmer the blue lake, swoon to songs of jade frogs. Soon, as owls in the treetops, I will throb with ancient fervor for the feast. |
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This Poem was Critiqued By: Paul R Lindenmeyer On Date: 2006-06-07 13:45:41
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Joanne,
have not been on site forever...Then saw your name on this revised piece...So you are back....interesting.
Your personification, as usual, escorts the reader thru the maze of nature's attire along with delightful
alliterations and assonances. S's abound with r's creating soft, subtle sounds, reflective of how nature speakes in the heart of the forest...Moon, water, lakes, frogs, "wisps of fog" and one of my favorite words, glimmer..Enjoyed as usual the stroll. Nice to see you back...My best, Paul