This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2006-08-06 22:42:42 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Surge at Eventide Why does Mr. Yeats do this?
This haunting to my marrow
Entering my insides with
Bolts of thought, golden heat, searing
Something that would be brash
Untoned by its touch....otherwise.
Blue rose, espiritu mundi, slouching beast,
The swan that took Leda:
Surge at eventide. |
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Copyright © August 2006 James C. Horak
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2006-08-12 10:37:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
James,
What a pleasure to find this upon my list, such a breath of fresh air. Yeats does what he has always done, imprints not just his thoughts but a part of his spirit on the reader, leaving the residue of his muse to haunt, sear that mind and spirit and prod into motivated thought/actions. So few words, so well place, the picture painted is worth more than the words themselves. Probably not what you were looking for however it is what I came away from your write with and in awe.
Best always,
Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2006-08-09 15:27:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi James....Recently I wrote a poem called..."A poet's dilemma" which in a way alludes to the theme of this poem. I don't think you critiqued it so you may want to take a peek! I love what you have done with this poem...it is so true that the poet's marrow is haunted by the desire to write but sometimes we can't find the right theme, the right words, or the most powerful, that we somehow know we are capable of writing. We feel so compelled to write our best every time that we lose sight of the fact that a terse poem like this one is actually superb and exciting in every way. "Bolts of thought, golden heat, searing" is an excellent line and I can relate to it in every sense of the word.
remember I told you I would like you to critique my work? I just posted one called "Voyeur" I would like you to critique.
Good poem...keep them comming! Marilyn
P.S. congrats on your win last month
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