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Very Bad Things

The ogres awoke in black of night Streets rolled up in craven fright They crawled on ugly wrinkled shins And curled ghastly lipless grins Then stood upon cloven feet Filled swollen bellies with red meat Spit the bones and wiped their chins Thus sat down on pumpkin skins Starless sky of Halloween Fell on ogres dressed in green They spat on gold rising sun All the ogres each and every one Bugaboo be gone, I say Or die in the light of day Evil be damned in shadow’s mind Despised by all human kind Slimy demons do shrink in fear And skulk away until next year

Copyright © October 2006 marilyn terwilleger

Additional Notes:
Happy Halloweeney


This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2006-10-27 21:25:08
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
marilyn--Even though this write conjures up morbid images, the couplets are humorous and entertaining. All the ghastly elements employed in this timely/seasonal work. Scribe's theme is carried well by the title, language and tone: the naunces of "Halloweeney" is written all over this offering. Outstanding! teafor2


This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2006-10-25 14:05:14
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
It's great to see someone who writes about the things and events of today. I'm not a fan of holloweenies and would ban the whole celebration if I could! So it's no surprise as to my favorite line- Evil be damned in shadow’s mind Despised by all human kind But this also is a striking line- They crawled on ugly wrinkled shins And curled ghastly lipless grins....good vivid images Spit the bones and wiped their chins Thus sat down on pumpkin skins.......this gave me goosebumps! It's a great poem. I really like it. I am curious about the word 'skulk'..?.. THANKS FOR THE TREAT! Ellen
This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2006-10-20 09:55:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Marilyn, what terrible imagery to apply to our own sweet little children!!! teh heh Well placed rhyme, with its scheme well crafted. Close observance of meter and a mutually appreciated tribute to my favorite time of year. If only I didn't live on a cul de sac, so far back that children seldom bang at my door with jack-o-lantern. The few that do, however, get loaded up on what the others have missed. There's somekind of metaphor in there somewhere. Some of the largest hawks I have seen, perhaps they are eagles, have begun roosting in my cottonwood at night. They sound like fox running through briars when they take off. That's not going to help much, either. JCH
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2006-10-19 19:48:41
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Marilyn, Happy Haloween to you! If only bugaboos left that easily! Cute poem, with fun factors. Scarey.....! Oh my yes! enjoyed the meat eater line, I'm becoming vegetarian/vegan. Isn't it great to be back here in full swing. My best your way. Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2006-10-19 18:51:42
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
And in the darknest shinneth the Everlasting Light.........Once again you have presented us with ghostly tales of things to come this Halloween.........I am so hoping this is the year my grandbabies come dressed up to frighten their little old memere here alone in the woods of Tully............The parades are scheduled for children to dress up and show off their ghostly tales of things to be and even the most fearful of oldies will shrink in fear when they come near.......good structure, great word flow, images galore and best of all you put the demons away before the end of night......thanks for posting and please know your gifts are always welcome......God Bless, Claire
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