This Poem was Submitted By: Thomas Edward Wright On Date: 2006-12-12 22:03:11 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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As Horses Graze at Dusk

If you could stand out here with me You could see this late light dying Into salmon pink, a shade evenings Exude as they tire of azure and white; But you are on safari, or diving Beneath the lid of the sea, seeking, I hope, eternal truth, internal clues, Or eluding critics asking you â€œWhy?” They glance, as they chew, for you; Six of our best gnaw on late fall’s  Last offering; we gaze over the range Where a winter storm gathers force. If you could sit out here with me, A thick plaid blanket about us, The air nipping, wisps of fog below, We could show you what you wanted to know.

Copyright © December 2006 Thomas Edward Wright


This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2006-12-28 10:17:51
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Ho, You could show it; you could certainly describe it (proved pudding); but . . . can you explain it? If the "you" is italicized, the question would have to be answered in the affirmative. If the "explain" were, the question would have to be answered in the negative - to the extent that explanation requires accordance with truth. Nonethless, nothing that I say will stop "you" from explaining. As long as you keep putting those explanations in poetry, that's fine with me. The Eagles look like they'll lock up the division. Which means they'll likely lose to the Falcons. That's Philly. The tree's still up. The presents are unwrapped. The fire is burning. And I'm as fucked up as ever. Ciao, Nox PS - missed the Wright year- end summary. I actually read the damn thing. Gave me insight into you, while I sat there paring my fingernails, a mystery. Made me feel like God. And you like the creature. A nice feeling, that.


This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2006-12-27 01:18:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Thomas, You're right! To learn internal truths, you don't need to ever leave home. Sitting in a field on a blanket or not, you can grow as well... We need to quiet ourselves down and listen to our internal voice of truth... But instead we run around like chickens with our heads cut off looking for answers that rarely come. Its like forcing someone to care. I'd love to sit in a pasture at dusk. Dellena good introspective poem. Love the title.
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2006-12-13 15:18:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Tom...This poem is another sample of your superb writing talent. I love horses and rode a lot, when I was young...."young" being the operative word! I envy some of your phrases and wish I had written them...such as... Into salmon pink, a shade evenings Exude as they tire of azure and white;......exceptional diving Beneath the lid of the sea, seeking,....I have used "ocean's lid" but I like "sea" better The air nipping, wisps of fog below,....I love "wisps of fog" evokes a wonderful image I'm not sure why I think this but I sense malancholy between the lines...is there, or not? Great poem...keep them coming? Cheers....M
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2006-12-13 11:33:47
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
A fine exhibit of true poetry! I have much admiration for this work, my friend. Very well penned! Your pictures are enthralling, clear, and vivid. If you could stand out here with me You could see this late light dying Into salmon pink, a shade evenings Exude as they tire of azure and white;....I don't understand why you chose to puncuate here, but it is so picturesque that I wish I were there. But you are on safari, or diving Beneath the lid of the sea, seeking, I hope, eternal truth, internal clues, Or eluding critics asking you “Why?”...I love 'beneath the lid of the sea" They glance, as they chew, for you; Six of our best gnaw on late fall’s ...Now I can see these horses! I don't even like horses but from this view I think they are awesome! You didn't say so, but in this crisp air I think I can see their steamy breath and hear them whinny up to you. If you could sit out here with me, A thick plaid blanket about us, The air nipping, wisps of fog below, We could show you what you wanted to know. Oh, for the wisdom! A seeker who travels to the unknown to find what is right there. I know someone just like that, and this poem is proof enough for me! I'll be sending this one on tomy friend. I don't know what else to say. I don't usually run out of words, but you got me so engrossed that I don't know what to say! I think this is lovely and you are at the top of my list for the best yet this month! Thank you for sharing. I needed this today. A true delight.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2006-12-13 06:42:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Tom this is beautifully written and presented. The title alone is more then enough to pull a reader in to share the beauty you present here with your words. Images of the night sky, the horses as they stand tall in the fields yet slightly bent over as they graze, you bring forth the distance between the two people thought of here within the lines as the safari takes place and the diving brings refreshing change.........then its back to the cool air of the season as a winter storm builds before coming in......I feel alot of wanting more within some lines and so much love within others..........well done and thank you for sharing. Merry Christmas and peace, love and joy of Christ be with you always, Claire
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