This Poem was Submitted By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2007-03-13 23:11:48 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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another Janis Fan

Bobby Magee? Oh yeah, I slept with him back in '63. Or was it '68? Can't seem to get that year straight. Heartbreaker? No, too dumb to break my heart Or even Take a piece of it -  It was Summertime, and I was Down on me. Just looking for fun and then Maybe, He'd take me for a ride in his Mercedes Benz And show me off to all of his cool friends We partied some then went walking through the rain But Bobby wasn't looking for any Ball and Chain. We didn't Try, or cry or want to go crazy, so we ended the fling with a  Bye Bye Baby.

Copyright © March 2007 DeniMari Z.

Additional Notes:
Janis Joplin month? I'm in, for the fun of it. Thanks for taking me back to my youth.


This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2007-03-22 13:28:12
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
Yes I remember those years too! This is an awesome tribute to this great American icon. Where would we have gone in the 60's without such influences ? I like the way you have used the song titles to tell your story. That's cool! From the beginning to the end, I like it. You have used rhythm and rhyme just right. I really like this. Good work poet! Ellen


This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2007-03-14 12:14:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
A nice use of her song titles, DeniMari. Interesting you focus more on, "Bobby Magee", you must have found like accord in someone you knew. Janis struck "soul assonance" with me a few times but she never made her male fans (like me) feel ostracized. Though I often heard comments about her "unattractiveness" she had some real lasting beauty to me. Well, you did hit on my favorite song, Take a Piece of My Heart, and she did...to this day. You have a little bit of Janis there inside, it's peeking around the edges of this poem. Well constructed, sensitive lyrics appropriate even to song. I may have done the same for the old Bob Dylan, but he had nothing on Janis. Nobody did. Hope we keep up the Janis Month theme. I'm already hunting old albums and trying to find a new magnetic cartridge for an old dusty turntable. JCH
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-03-14 05:44:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Being in for the fun of it certainly got your pen swirling with a fine presentation .....nice style, once more the words present images, details of the fun of summertime with rides in the Mercedes, walks in the rain, no ball and chain seekers ..........bringing us all back in time, allowing our own memories to filter through and in my case put a smile on my face......and joy in my heart. Thanks again for taking the time to share your gift with us. Be safe, take care, God Bless, Claire
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