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This Poem was Submitted By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-05-28 22:27:05 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Infatuation

You took my breath away One doesn't need two breaths To live fully and happily I cannot exist without mine! So would you please give it back?

This Poem was Critiqued By: Rick Barnes On Date: 2007-06-04 14:09:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Dellena, Hi! I love this. It is so-o-o-o concise and to the point. I really love shorter works these days. I don't know if it is the result of impatience or a realization that this is what poetry does best. At any rate this poem is proof that you do it very well. I have missed you by the way and but for the saying of it, it goes without saying. -Rick

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-06-04 11:54:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90909
Dellena, Your dry sense of humor is not wasted on this reader, love your ending. I applaud what you've said and the way you've said it in this easy flowing easy to read simplistic poem. Brava! Best always, Lora

This Poem was Critiqued By: Erin Summer Barkley On Date: 2007-06-04 03:48:13
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
CUTE! and almost anyone can relate... its like one of my favorite quotes "prithee send me back my heart,since I cannot have thine, for if from yours you will not part, than why shouldst thou have mine?"- John Suckling (SONG)

This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2007-06-02 21:35:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Men have something of a retort like this, but it's a bit more naughty. Of course, I'll give you credit for a "thought poem" although I doubt few others will. My Midoz (midol) poem notwithstanding. Hope things are more agreeable to you...and that breath comes back nice and fresh. JCH

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-06-02 15:26:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.87500
Hi D....an interesting five line poem that speaks volumes. I have known people who took my breath away, as well, and as far as I know I never got it back either. This is a clever idea for a poem and I would like to see you expound on it a bit! Well done. Cheers....Marilyn

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-05-30 08:04:14
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.73333
Loved the read, good title and plenty of images created with a few words.......too cute Del.......God Bless, be well my friend. Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2007-05-28 22:42:54
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hooray!! Hooray!! Excellent and then he writes a song. I watched the cat grasping for something in the air, a fly maybe... and never reaching... and then the poem- powerful, of love, maybe unrequited, maybe un wanted, or maybe.. Hooray!! Exstatic, and we must breath... CPR? That will replace 1/3 the oxygen, but never the breath.... After your last two, I hope you are alright Dellena. Sometimes it all just gets too hard to excuse.

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