This Poem was Submitted By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-06-17 22:44:29 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Behind The Curtain

I'm off to see the Wizard From a capital city not Oz He's guarded and difficult to meet He changes faces depending… Most visitors come in vain I've come far in search of answers I wish to ask him… If I see mistakes in my government How do I not contribute to the wrong? If I know of government evil How can I as one stop it?  If I'm required to work for injustice Should I break the law to stop it? If I corner the Wizard he may run  If I took a sneak peak behind the curtain  Who or what will be there, what shall I see? Darkness, lightness, rightness, wrongness,  I think most likely……there'll be a lot of flimflammery?

Copyright © June 2007 Dellena Rovito


This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2007-07-07 23:25:26
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Dellena, I like the context - corruption in government and abuse of power. The imagery of drawing the curtain (as in the wizard of oz) makes this piece imaginative, yet grounded in political reality - an individual determined to voice an opinion and break from the shackles of mis-guided authority. Dorothy found a man lesser than the grandeur of a wizard behind the curtain......I guess you found more than a man - the prophet of doom himself? Interesting angle to this one. Duane.


This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-07-03 17:12:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.83333
Off to visit the President I see......better have your red slippers with you for a fast get away.....interesting read port; you might be better off in Oz............it is a shame what is actually taking place in our Capital these days; and perhaps for a few years past as well..........what can we do about it? I honestly believe that if more people opened their eyes and admitted what they see going on is wrong and take a stand to change it and mean it........perhaps we might have a chance to avoid WW3; otherwise I fear we are heading quickly down that road..............thanks for the post and honest feelings associated with it.........you take good care now; we need your constant attention to the site...God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2007-06-20 16:17:28
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena, mostly I will speak to the frustration of the piece. The instances of an ideologue speaking or not- could drop in on any side- what side yours is; is inconsequential. There are times when the knowledge that I cannot change a thing about CA, even, if you will that my vote is a waste here- is so frustrating; never mind, that is not what I want to say. Rewrite “how can I as one stop it” I think this is the crux of your poem and also its weakest line. Nowadays the press looks behind too many curtains and the flimflamery is not limited to the politics at hand. That too is suffocating. Here’s what I think; Oz didn’t get there by him/herself. Depending on the Oz factor elected; a different set of observers respond with frustration. They all think they are right and few want to allow perspective for the difficulties of running Oz. Behind the curtain; maybe the more who feel they must pull it back, the less likely it is that anything substantive will get done. It is said that far more of our economy is buttressed over two martinis than ever gets done in the office. Made me think Dellena, I like that; even though I have a feeling that we may not be always be frustrated at the same time. I wonder if after the deal at the crossroads; all those who were uplifted, for so long, by the inspired guitar work would be sympathetic when the guitarist finally had to surrender his soul.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2007-06-19 08:51:28
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Interesting piece you require the reader to focus on questions and what them to delve into their own thoughts. I like this it makes the reader think. Well done. Thanks, Thomas
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-06-18 03:07:51
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena, Still as viable as your other post. However, last stanza L2 and L3 have confusing verb sense...you may want to take another look at the verbs used. Anyway, I think you've hit the whole thing right on the head. Best always, Lora
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