This Poem was Submitted By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-07-11 15:57:17 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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The Snapshot

An agreeable passer-by snapped the shutter The photo seized us at that point of time Us beings present as we were then An age, a smile, our style, in youthfulness  Energy was flowing from us into the picture. Friendship was captured on film and set to paper It was taken after this and before that, happened When everything changed for all of us Now years past, one of us has since left this world  Yet her spirit still shines forth in the snapshot It sits framed on my desk same as ever I glance at it daily, it’s as if nothing has changed. I'm here, we were there, and I remember that place,  The moment with them, recorded and since cherished It was no special occasion for anybody, but us  Friends touching close, smiling into the camera.

Copyright © July 2007 Dellena Rovito

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2007-08-04 18:30:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena, to grab a moment of this I’d have to grab the entire verse. A terrific use of language to capture a “spatial” moment if you will. “at that point in time”, “beings present”, “after this and before that”, “everything changed”, “years past”, “since left”, “snapshot”, “as if nothing has changed”, those phrases keep this verse in such flux that the reader (delightfully so in a melancholy sort of way) has not chance to rest. The entire piece is superb and pensive. Then – “I’m here, we were there, and I remember that place” never mind the alliteration throughout the piece, this line personalizes for all of us your thoughts, but also focuses the readers. “Smiling into the camera” – sorry to steal your lines, but here we see the end of your verse meeting the beginning- and back. Excellent verse, very well done!!

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-07-22 17:24:45
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena, Simply delicious in verbiage and line penned. A very enjoyable read and one that also gives one chance to ponder things seen by a different eye. Although, I feel that it was truly a special occasion for all there, you were together and in unison chose to capture the moment...friends touching and shareing is always special. Kudos! Best always, Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-07-13 21:52:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena I am sorry for the passing of your friend and I rejoice with you in the good times you and she shared as you walked through life.........your words are soft, filled with love, memories, smiles, perhaps a few sad memories when you think of what was back then but in reality you have paid her such a wonderful tribute in this one. Camera's people often say no.....don't take my picture, but when the picture taken reveals such a wonderful friendship, who can say no......... Thanks for posting, I had a good friend once, from kindergarden till we hit high school We kept in contact after we graduated, married, had our own families though she moved away from our local city. She died in her early forties...........I think of her still and when I do I see that beautiful round faced girl, with pure white skin and dark hair.......knowing she is still with us all. God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2007-07-13 18:52:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Were we to ever look upon a photo as an embodiment of its own reality, capturing spirits perhaps...taking flight into fancy to worlds made more perfect by our hopes and dreams...which I think we all privately do, the memory becomes truely organic awareness. You poem plays with this momentarily and your apology, "It was no special occasion..." is unnecessary. It's magic and one need never apologize. The syntax is very good, lengthening out to well accommodate the interesting rhyme and the meter count is just as it needs be for an assonate quality that does more than fill a line. It occurs to me, Dellena, your poet's ear has been given more play than usual and I detect an interesting quality arising from that. The lines, "Energy was flowing from us into the picture./Friendship was captured on film and set to paper." is excellent on two levels. First, the topical, the part of the story imparted and second, the poets set of idea into imagery. Gifted parallelism. JCH
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2007-07-12 09:12:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena, A moment captured a feeling of friendship seen in the faces, love the touch no special ocasion but it was for friendship was shared and joy felt. It is so true that the spirit never leaves for we remember each and every ocasion when I minds reflect upon the past. Good topic snapshot of life. Thanks, Thomas
This Poem was Critiqued By: Nancy Ann Hemsworth On Date: 2007-07-11 22:19:57
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
so sorry for the loss of your dear friend Dellena. there is so much material that can be taken for images and souls captured on glossy paper. This is so wonderfully honest..your feeling just as they are...so real It is true that pictures are personal when taken of family, friends and pets.."It was no special occasion for anybody, but us Friends touching close, smiling into the camera." but priceless to the ones who love you. thanks for sharing your personal treasure with us ..Nancy
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