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Criss-Cross They get in to their secured vehicles, every day. He, from his room Little he from his. Then they drive straight for me. Although I’m able to dodge some of it, Most of it hits me, knocks me down senseless. The release comes in waves of tears through broken dreams, a beautiful song And a prayer for financial means, to escape. I know what intimidation feels like. I know what hostile means. I know the scour in their eyes, the displeasure of my sight, yet after all this time it still doesn’t feel right - to me - or anyone around me looking in. My blood flows through one - the other My incompetence of seeing the real person Till it’s too late. I scrape at the crumbs they drop and commit myself To “Mother†them both for now, but the pot is boiling, The rain has not cleared the way So I’ll just keep On writing, to get rid of what I have to say. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2007-08-07 09:57:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.84615
DeniMari,
What hurt held within, what sadness is felt, what being taken for granted is all about for some. These are just a few of the feelings you have given the reader. To release on paper is still holding the feeling within for it only releases a moment about the things being felt. This was a sad poem to read but it is what poetry is all about. Well done in expressing yourself.
Thanks for sharing, Thomas