This Poem was Submitted By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-08-06 22:37:54 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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The Cat She sits quietly nearby
asking to be noticed
She gazes into his eyes,
wanting his awareness
She does the typical feline
posturing action
Rubbing lightly against
his body to attract him
She waits patiently anticipating his fond touch
She speaks to him
in psyche concentration of thought:
"See me, stroke me
I want to be important to you!
I have preened myself
with greatest deliberation
My fur glows clean
I'll be soft and responsive for you
My purring shows my appreciation and pleasure
I will always give you
my unconditional love
So must I whine or howl
to get your full attention?
Master why are you opening the door to put me out?"
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Copyright © August 2007 Dellena Rovito
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2007-08-29 09:34:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.92308
Dellena,
Is this more than just a cat...I sense depth here with the cat actually being someone that requires attention but receives no more than a stroke. You have captured me into this piece wanting me to go deeper and deeper into the feelings and that to me is poetry. Well done and thanks for sharing this was very enjoyable.
Thanks, Thomas
This Poem was Critiqued By: Monica ONeill On Date: 2007-08-26 16:37:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Dellena,
I am so rusty at this.
So it goes with the feline persuasion. How sad to be put out in the cold when all that was wanted was a little affection. Is there a hidden meaning beneath these seemingly straightforward lines? There very well could be...or perhaps it is just my mind set at the moment.
Mouchie, our cat, does all of these things...but only goes out on a leash...and then he walks me...most of the time.
Nice read.
Cheers,
Moni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2007-08-19 22:22:42
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena, being a cat lover I primped and cleaned myself throughout the reading. You characterizations are superb.
It all makes the King and Queen seem servants to the kitty. You analyze the psyche, the pomp and circumstance- the need and the independence.... and left me wishing I, I too, were a cat in king Arthur’s court!!
And then the last line- well Dellena, no self respecting cat, in their right mind, would ever call the tolerable occupants of their house “Masterâ€- maybe serf would suffice?
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2007-08-11 17:49:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Yup, sounds just like my cat, though I don't ever let him out. He is defiantely spoiled and an inside cat.
Thank you for the erad, I enjoyed it alot.
Rene'
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-08-08 16:22:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi D....wow....I thought you were writing about a man you just discovered! Then, your last line threw me for a loop! Pretty sexy write for just a cat. Love the way you wrote this....like a woman speaking to her lover....veyr clever, my friend. I went back and read it again and this time I saw the humor which I missed completely the first time. Great poem with a surprise ending....
Maarilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-08-07 22:24:08
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Oh my Dellena,
I could actually visualize and empathize with this cat. Such a great view through an animals eyes, how clever you are. Your verbiage is the perfect vehicle in this write and truly expounds on a world that we humans so often give thought to. Yes, why is master opening door to put out poor kitty. Really liked this.
Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-08-07 08:57:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Love it, love it and love it some more........reading each word brings forth images of my own Snowball who is such a talker, being pure white he loves to lay in the dirty garden then come to the back door wanting in. Of course he needs to wash up first and begins the long process as his fur is fluffy and long.......by the way he has one blue eye/one green eye and knows how to use them both..........his tales of woe are never ending and the part I love most about this read is the way you are having the cat speak to his master......now I can see my Jerry who gets frustrated when the cat talks too long or too loudly and he too opens the back door letting the cat out.........the read is smooth from start to finish, your words just continue to flow and I do believe this one should be in book form for everyone to enjoy .........as always your gift is wonderful and I do thank you for posting and sharing......hope you are well and that this heat is not doing you in. Take good care, God Bless, Claire
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