This Poem was Submitted By: Mary J Coffman On Date: 2007-08-22 14:44:13 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Of Diamonds and Moonbeams
A waxing moon
wakens
to paint her slender smile
onto the sumptuous cobalt canvas
of a midnight sky
lavishly sprinkled with
twinkling topaz
while mother-of-pearl tears
drift down from
dreamland’s crystalline cache
ghost trees
no longer crowded with leaves
dance in her opaline sheen
as winter whispers
through lace-lined fingers
drizzling diamond dust
along icy edges of
indigo streams
vague ivory vapors rise
like ephemeral phantoms
from water warmer than air
it is here I remain
in peaceful stillness
savoring
each delicate composition
listening
to unspoken sounds
reveling
in a symphony
of silent serenity
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Copyright © August 2007 Mary J Coffman
Additional Notes:
It's been in the 100's here...was just remembering the beauty of a winter's night at 18 below zero...when everything glittered in the moonlight along the river's edge. A vision I shall remember always.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-09-07 20:21:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Mary,
Again, superlative, makes one want to gravitate toward a canvas and splash your colored pictures there on...ah, such freshness as this was needed for a weary soul...do hope you are putting these into a collection.
Namaste'
Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2007-09-03 20:44:14
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.76471
Very beautiful write and formatted perfect as well. Yea, it has been over 100 here everyday for weeks now but I sure hate winter...lol. Though the vision is breathtaking and you have penned its beauty perfect.
Rene'
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-08-31 22:16:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.75000
Mary.
Whether it be the moonlight in winter or moonlight everyday, any day, the sky is
just as wonderful!
Your words are delicious!
Your peace and serenity throughout show through.
Your heights are in direct opposite to your sorrows.
Thats how it works/you know, and you show this om this piece.
Peace
dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-08-29 15:47:52
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.81818
Hi Mary....this is a superb poem and one I wish I had written! The wonderful word choices and phrases paints a beautiful image in my mind. We have had an unusally hot summer, as well, and I have found myself almost wishing for the cold of winter. I have tried to pick a favorite phrase and even though I have read this several times I cannot chose one over the other. Your skill as a writer is very evident in this poem. brava and a dozen red roses at your feet!
blessings....Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-08-28 08:04:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.94444
And a vision you most grasciously created with the flare of your pen, the words just flowing erupting into an icy wonderland glittering in the moonlight along the river's edge. It is all so beautiful poet.....I would hope you would not change one word for it is so perfect as it is. Thank you for posting and I pray your temperature drops enough to be comfortable. We were in the mid 90's with extremely high humidity and for those of us with heart and lung problems the air quality was horrid. God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2007-08-23 09:57:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Mary,
I love how you paint a picture of a scene in the beginning it makes me want to go outside at night and look at the sky. Your use of colors and jewels gives the picture that extra touch making it a perfect moment in time. Excellent work.
Thanks for sharing your moment with us. Thomas
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