This Poem was Submitted By: Monica ONeill On Date: 2007-08-26 16:31:43 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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A GLYMPSE OF HEAVEN
fires banked
five years gone
a timbered voice
familiar
endearing
unravels time
allowing one
brief
glowing moment
of
warm affection
all too soon
as a rose
in reverse fold
the ember
seeks its cradle
beneath
scented petals
in patient muse
til wakened
once again
by his
verbal caress
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Copyright © August 2007 Monica ONeill
Additional Notes:
Taking a time out from my business writing today. I talked to an old friend yesterday and for the first time in a long time, I have allowed myself to feel. I guess I'm healing. Cheers, Moni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-10-05 01:59:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Moni,
So sorry that I didn't get to this one sooner, it is perfection in all ways, just as you and he were. Thank you for sharing such an intimate feeling with us, for trusting in us and letting us be here for you.
Best always,
Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2007-09-03 20:46:02
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.76471
Moni,
Cingrats of feeling again. I know to well how one can be so numb to pain. Your words are penned with perfection and your format is perfect.
Rene'
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2007-08-29 09:16:25
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.92308
Monica,
How I like how you make the reader sense a moment and dig into the poem you have written. Missing one, Losing one, remembering one these are all important and they shine in this piece. I like the presentation for you move the reader along and the ending where you show how important the words have been.
Well done, Thomas
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-08-28 18:04:05
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.00000
Monica,
Good for you!
I can only imagine what you've gone through.
A man is a good thing also.
It must make you feel guilty to feel happiness, it's just that life is so short we must
allow ourselves to be happy today.
Your poem is quite nice.
Soft, light, and good.
Great job.
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-08-28 17:18:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90000
Hi Moni....this is such a lovely poem and one that tugs at my heart strings. I like the way you formatted it with no punctuationa and in lower case. It is as if you wrote down your thoughts quickly less they be lost in a swirl of grief. I think we are protected, somewhat, when we experience a tremendous loss such as death of a loved one. I felt I was numb about an inch deep all over my body and my soul so that the hurt could not assualt me when I wasn't expecting it. "by his verbal caress" is a wonderful line and it does speak to me. Well done and a good contest entry for this month!
blessings....Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-08-28 08:11:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.94444
It certainly is okay to feel again poet and I so pray you are healing......this is a nice, easy flowing piece which actually brings forth memories of yet another time for myself. I am sure Arnie is smiling down upon you and you know he would want you to live and be happy........it is good to see your work posted again; I look forward to seeing more. I still have visions of the red head in her convertible crossing the country to meet that very special clown.........take good care now, continue to heal and may the good Lord continue to bless you also, Hugs, Claire
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