This Poem was Submitted By: Paul H. Roefs On Date: 2007-09-07 15:10:03 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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The Beauty of Dreams
I have dreams that I could fly
Place my foot upon the sky.
Maybe I'd zoom into space
Great storms may give chase.
Whirling winds toss me around
Spin me though space with abound.
Dashing with comets and stars
Burning brightly near and far.
Astrologic beauty beams
Stars are born in silent screams.
Noctural novas so bright
Dancing to my dream's delight
Floating close to earth I see
How lovely our rock can be
Ending my flight though space
My feet left barely a trace |
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Copyright © September 2007 Paul H. Roefs
Additional Notes:
What would we do without dreamers and dreams? My most creative abilities surface through my dreams. For my friends at PTL, " The beauty of Dreams". With love, Paul; a.k.a.Donpablo
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mary J Coffman On Date: 2007-09-11 13:46:45
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Paul...This is just beautiful! An abundance of vivid imagery makes this such a pleasure to read, as does a wonderful rhyme scheme, and cadence. It flows right along, as if we were being swept up into the dream right along with you. "....stars are born in silent screams...." LOVE this line! The write, in its entirety, evokes such depth of thought... Yes, what would we be if not for dreams? It is a freedom not to be taken lightly, lest we become starved of their beauty in our lives. Well done, poet! Thank for this much needed respite, and the journey into the realm of dreams this morning. I so enjoyed this!
Best Always,
Mary
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-09-08 22:24:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Ah, the romantic always and with such glib verse. I really enjoyed this lyrical rhyme and the pictures you painted with it. Does definitely give one a few thoughts to ponder. In stanza 2 L2 typo I think "though" is it suppose to be "through" also 4th stanza L3; same word/ typo? It is a shame that we can't fix those things on the fly here at TPL... just the same wonderful peaceful poem you've given us and for that I thank you.
Best always,
Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2007-09-08 00:26:05
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.00000
Paul,
BRAVO! You have penned this piece with excellence. Your theme follows the read through out. Your imagery is breathtaking and stars being born in silent screams (my favorite line) I love it!
Rene
This Poem was Critiqued By: Debbie Spicer On Date: 2007-09-07 21:09:12
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Dear Paul,
My, this poem left me breathless. To be able to fly (which I always which I could and endorse it in my website, you have given me a view of what the possibility could be. You’re rhyme signifies what a great poet you are. I would love to zoom into space, yet I know it is all upon grace.
The spinning in tossing one around, it enchanting. Can you only imagine would it would be like? I have no idea what it could possibly be like, but from your poem, I gain a new perspective. In my website, this is just what I have imagined. Regardless that you’re feet left barely a trace, I can see a viewpoint I have not seen before. Thank you for giving this to me.
My very best
Debbie
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-09-07 20:10:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I have to agree with you....we would be lost without our dreams........and I can honestly say when I was a young girl the nuns would tell my mom.....she's a dreamer alright......looks like you are one too my friend for this one certainly does take flight with each flare of your pen.....this work also has a nice rhyme to it and continues to flow with one image after another. I would always dream a little before going to sleep and found you were able to bring your dreams to rest and become reality in the night. Thanks again, God Bless, Claire
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