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This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2007-09-21 05:38:35 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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E. B.

Eric, no invitation, no initiation, no tender moment nurturing Into a world of sparse remedy for lustless intention. All his people, replacing innermost The outermost....empty Outermost. Every defeat uncontested like he wasn't worth it to himself. Picking up pennies to clean and tuck away. His bacon all crispy, those pennies crispy....clean. He wants more diamond erasures While he shows me how Shiny pennies, in bags tucked away Kept until the day People will avow In His Name to Trust. For Eric is no miser.

Additional Notes:
This a about a real person I know who spends much of his time "repairing" the abuse done to pennies (sometimes other coins) bearing a reference to God. Bags and bags and bags of them, now too nice to place back in circulation, an intersting reversal of potlatch.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Paul H. Roefs On Date: 2007-10-04 04:23:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.88889
James, This friend of yours is a particular individual, but I understand his purpose. People may not respect the beauty of his work and, or the coins themselves. To restore their beauty is a special need in some special and Eric is one of these people. I would liken Eric to the scientist whose works in detail and goes unnoticed. You are so very observant to see and to put your observations into poetry. The theme is well chosen and you have done a great job here. Thank you. Best to you, Paul

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-10-02 11:38:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.84615
What a treasure this one is and the man you write about as well. Good form, word flow allows the reader to get to know a little more about E.B. Have you written of this man before? Perhaps you might continue to add to these writing as the days flow. Thanks and God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2007-09-22 01:37:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
Wow! This is dfferent. It being a true story, in my opinion even makes it that much more of an enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing a part of your life with us as well as your friend. Rene'

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mary J Coffman On Date: 2007-09-21 17:38:42
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90909
James, What an interesting tale you tell here. Of all things....pennies. Those things some consider to be useless, a treasure to Eric. How simple a thing to please someone... Love the lines "his bacon crispy, his pennies crispy...clean...." A wonderful analogy! It helps to drive home the idea that this seems to be all this person seems to do....all day long, day in - day out. And, that last line..."For Eric is no Miser." Indeed, he is not. He has simply found a simple treasure to provide satisfaction and worth. Yeah Eric! It is, indeed, a reversal of potlatch. Thanks for sharing this wonderful tale. It has made me step back and really think. How complicated we sometimes make our lives. Though this may not have been your intent when writing this, it has provided a certain depth of thought! :) My Best Always, Mary

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-09-21 11:53:15
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
James, If I remember correctly you've written another poem about this gentleman. A clearer picture you have given with this, while many might see him as eccentric or miserly it is clear that he is not. Evidently he finds comfort in his collecting and restoring much the way a sculpter or artist might in their work or a poet in his. I can relate somewhat to this person, the locking away or getting lost in the task--the enjoyment of doing something well and that brings pleasure perhaps only to the one doing the task. To me the action is somewhat "zen" and has it's own rewards. Your poem makes it easy to know Eric, to appreciate him as an individual and perhaps even applaud him for being his own person. I enjoyed this write very much, from pace to verbal images. I do not think you need the explicitive at the end however I enjoyed that also. Thanks for a great read. Best always, Lora

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