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ALL HALLOWS EVE

"ALL HALLOWS EVE" THE FARMER SAID.  "A NIGHT OF NOISES, FEAR AND DREAD.    AN EVE WHEN SPOOKS AND GHOSTS APPEAR!     THE TIME WHICH EVEN STRONG HEARTS FEAR!" "I'M NOT ASCARED!" THE YOUNG LAD SAID.  "THERE'S NO SUCH THINGS BENEATH MY BED.    AND IF THERE WHERE I'D SCREAM AND YELL,     TURN ON MY LIGHTS AND RING THIS BELL!" "JUST WHAT'S THAT BELL SUPPOSED TO DO?"   THE FARMER ASKED WITH MUCH ADIEU.    "IT'S MAGICAL AND MEANT TO CHASE       THE DEVIL BACK TO THAT HOT PLACE!" "THAT'S QUITE A TALE!" THE FARMER SAID.  "NOW AS FOR WHAT'S BENEATH YOUR BED,    YOU REALLY THINK SOME LIGHTS AND BELLS     WILL SEND THEM RUNNING BACK TO H..L?" "YOU BETCHA, SURE!" THE LAD REPLIED.   "THE SOUNDS AND BRIGHT LIGHTS HURT THEIR EYES."     "INDEED A TALE, FOR SURE A YARN,       BUT I HAVE SPOOKS INSIDE MY BARN!" "BARN GHOSTS ARE QUITE ANOTHER BUNCH.   THEY SCREECH AND HOWL AND THUMP AND CRUNCH!!     YOU REALL THINK SOME LIGHTS AND BELLS        WILL SEND THEM RUNNING BACK TO H..L?" "DON'T KNOW." THE LAD SAID, NOW DISTRESSED.   "PERHAPS THEY'RE MAD OR JUST POSSESSED,     OR MAYBE TRAPPED INSIDE THE HAY      AND FEARFUL OF THE LIGHT OF DAY!" "INSIDE THE HAY! NOW THAT WOULD SOLVE   THE QUESTION OF THE COW'S RESOLVE.    YOU SEE, THE COWS, INSTEAD OF MOO,      ALL HOLLOWS EVE AS ONE HOWL, BOO!!!!!!!"

Copyright © October 2007 Paul R Lindenmeyer

Additional Notes:
AS POETS DO, A BOO TO YOU!!


This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2007-11-04 06:30:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Very clever and appropriate fare for our nation's tribute to witches' sabbath. I like your use of refrain and of tight verse and well-turned couplet. The last line is of an almost classical Elizabethan construct, earning my respect for your ability with the language of the bard. And, yes, a boo to you, too. JCH


This Poem was Critiqued By: Paul H. Roefs On Date: 2007-10-18 03:56:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.33333
Paul, It is nice to see a new poet on PTL, or I do not remember reading one of your poems. I take great pride in critiquing poet's with my name sake. Great poem and it read very nicely. I love your choice of words and your narrative. I was laughing throughout the read ,because brought me back to my childhood days when HALLOWEEN EVE was a special time. Not only for the hope of collecting all kinds of goodies to eat late that night and for days after, but because of the spooky excitement. I have to share a moment with you, back then I was the second oldest of 7 children and my age as about 9 years. I slept in a bedroom with 4 brothers and one Halloween Eve after our "trick, or treating" was over. We went to bed happy and excited, each with our treasured sack of candies, cookies, fruit and some money, we could not wait to get to our bedroom to rummage through our bags of goodies. Mom would remind us not to eat too much candy and get sick. Lights out and the munching and crunching started along with each person telling his best Halloween Tale of spooks and goblins. Each tales generated more fear and noise among us. Dad would come to the staircase and yell" go to sleep and I don't to hear one more peep out of anyone." So, we tried to go to sleep. I lowered my cover and starred into the darkened room and I let out a scream. Everyone wanted to know what I was screaming about, Look at the door way Here come a big white ghost, and he's going to kill us all. They all looked and visualized to same white-Ghost. We all scream at the top of our lungs and of course that brought both, Mom and Dad to our bedroom. When they turned on the light we all sighed with relief, because what we have visioned as a ghost, was nothing but the white laundry bag hanging on the back of the door. The End !!! >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> I have a found a few typos: 2nd Stanza, 1st line; " I'm not ascared...." I don't believe ascared is a word, may a slang word? Should be, afraid, or scared. 3nd Stanza, 2nd line, "....ask with much ado." The word adieu, means goodbye, or farewell. I think you should replace that word with, ado ( ado, on the other hand means; with fuss, bustle, or activity) 6th Stanza, 3rd line; "You reall think some lights and bells......." You mean, " You really think some lights and bells...... instead of "reall".? You have done a very nice job and I will be looking forward to reading more of your poetry. Best to you, Paul ( Roefs )
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-10-10 11:12:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Such an enjoyable read poet, great presentation as images start with the very first line. Actually, should be put to book form for children of all ages to enjoy during this spooky season. Going to forward to my son to read and share with his two girls. Thanks for posting, and BOO to you too in BRAVO sort of way, God Bless, Claire enjoyed the rhyme as well as the word flow.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2007-10-10 01:07:04
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Paul!! CLAP! CLAP! CLAP! Bravo! Excellent poem. It kept my interest from the very first sentence. I didn't want the story to end. You did an exceptionally excellent job in your rhymes as your words tell a story through out. Again, Bravo!! Rene'
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-10-09 17:49:45
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Paul, This is such a delightful peace, iambic flow is impeccable. I strongly feel that this such be mandatory reading for all young people, well adults also. You've given us a chance to fall back and be children again. Bravo and "BOO" back at ya. (good cows, good cows) Best always, Lora
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