This Poem was Submitted By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2008-02-22 17:06:04 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Cycle of a Mother's Love
The love and "Me Too's" we learn
As a child carries us through life
Tears, laughter, smiles and kisses
Gentle touches
Mother, forever there to chase
Your hurt away
Peace and security
Within a mother's arms
A gentle yes
A stern no
Teaching a child
Right from wrong
All of these are a part
Of a mother's love
As time passes children grow
Roles seem to change
Mother becomes a grand and a great
The love showed to her children
Now passes down
A never ending cycle of
A mother's love continuing to grow
Additional Notes:
The hardest words my mother had to say was "I love you" instead we would get a "me too". Mom earned her angel wings four years ago already; still seems like yesterday...In those four years my youngest daughter has presented us with two grandchildren thus a Mother's Love continues to grow........thanks for stopping by and taking the time to read this.
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Copyright © February 2008 Claire H. Currier
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2008-02-24 21:21:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Claire,
This is lovely, it shows your motherhood. You were loved, you passed it on to your children, and they to theirs.
The never ending cycle. It's good you got a 'me too'. It's much better than nothing.
It is difficult to say I love you.......for me also!
But with your words, it sounds like you got it down right, you are very blessed.
Good job Claire!
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2008-02-24 13:56:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Claire,
So nice to see this offerring from your pen. A very enjoyable read with and easy flow of well penned thoughts, a guide we should all use. Yes, children are such a great gift, so sad that so many don't realize it until it is too late. Thank you for this Sunday morning easy read.
Best always,
Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2008-02-23 23:58:00
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Claire,
You have expressed very heartfelt emotion in these lines...the circular flow of love (in this case, that of a mother's) is continual...lov begets love. You must be a very proud mother and a proud daughter too...as you look at your children and reminisce the role your mother played in getting you through life's hurdles....yes. we have much to owe our family's...but thankfuly, they dont expect payback...love is free..and the love of family is often the purest.
take care,
duane.
This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2008-02-23 09:06:04
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.66667
It is a very interesting perception of yours here, Claire, to see this love of a mother
extending out into other generations, almost "genetically".
You lines harbor subtle internal rhyme scheme and lovely assonance, making the reader
feel them, "more to the heart" than had they been more seemingly contrived.
The lines, "Mother, forever there to chase/Your hurt away" is center to your poem's
"ideal" or core. The idealization is furthered in the ending lines, "A never ending cycle
of/A mother's love continuing to grow", where it develops into organic promise.
Warmth and humanity shines through.
JCH
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2008-02-23 00:02:57
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.80000
Hi Claire....what a treat it is to see a poem from your pen! No matter if a mother says I love you or just a 'me too' matters not....I am sure she loved her family with all her heart. Losing a parent is a difficult thing to overcome...it takes a long time. You have written this with emotion, passion and great love for your mom. It is a lovely tribute to her and I hope you will share it with the rest of your family. Congrats on two more grandchildren....they are so wonderful, aren't they? Keep writing your poems have been missed.
Blessings...marilyn
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