This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2008-05-10 10:24:16 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Mr. Hinkey Inconceivable is it?...
the acclaimed might resort
Drinking their own piss
when they could defer
And shoot an elephant in the head?
How well a rice farmer
balancing a honey pot there
Not intruding a word or thought
to making smaller squeezes
On the Nipple of Nature.
So we know better?
Mixing in chemicals to oblige
mixed up notions we have
Thoughts any better than
what comes out our ass? |
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Copyright © May 2008 James C. Horak
Additional Notes:
Dedicated to those that should take this to heart.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2008-05-28 12:19:29
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi James,
LOL, I guess this was not dedicated to me for my name is not Mr. Hinkey and I defiantely wouldn't shoot an elephant in the head. I really liked the ending for I am sure everyone at sometime in their life has had thoughts come out of our asses but hopefully we learn from our mistakes as we grow in life.
I am really curious as to what your thought process was when writing this because I have read this three times and still don't understand.
Always,
Rene'
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2008-05-24 21:13:47
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.80000
Interesting read poet....your words certainly do paint strong images...and emotions.......I wonder if those that it is meant to touch will find and read it........do we really know better? A good question with much food for thought.......and here's to you Mr. Horak.......good job. God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2008-05-24 15:19:03
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
James,
I actually think drinking piss is a healthy thing! People did/or do it from olden days and it does have merit!
Although in this writing you used it differently. And yes effectively as a shock factor and a negative
against the ACCLAIMED.
quote: So we know better? Mixing in chemicals to oblige mixed up notions we have
And we all have our individual notions of what makes good.....some thoughts coming out the wrong end.
Me included with many friends! But most try to get clear as to whats going on, and others don't care.'
Good,.always thoughtful clear writing.
Dellena
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