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This Poem was Submitted By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2008-10-17 14:46:12 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Yesterday's Tomorrow

Memories of the soul flood without quenching, buried in sleep dust, swirling in endless circles. Under frayed ribbons of deception they beckon variegated threads of yesterday. I watch stars like keyholes in the incessant sky and wonder if all my tomorrows will be lived in yesterday.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2008-11-04 16:07:14
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Marilyn, I have no problem with the first stanza, and like "sleep dust." Excellent. Stars (the "frayed ribbons" I presume) as "deception" is intriguing. The "variegated threads" is weak. The stars as "keyholes" is likewise excellent. The thought of tomorrows lived in yesterday is very fine, acknowledging the fact that the light we live in is old, very old, having travelled aeons of light years to reach us. Somewhat uneven, but some great concepts and images. In this desert of non-production this will stand out with its suggestions of real imaginative life, and will get some points from me in that contest that I thought defined this site. But it's been established that I know next to nothing about this site and what the contributors are here for. But I contribute and hope to throw some glow toward a bright tomorrow. MSS

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2008-10-23 23:06:45
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.30769
Hi poet.....Interesting title, Yesterday's Tomorrow.......seems no matter how hard I try I can never find tomorrow for it is always today.....memories of the soul.....what would be do without those memories we hold so dear to our heart......the opening stanza has many thoughts and images which are carried though the poem...having loved so much and having lost as well, my heart aches for the times my own dreams bring back yesterday.......interesting path to take.....enjoyed the read, and as always look forward to more of your work for you certainly have a gift well worth sharring. God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2008-10-22 14:00:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Marilyn, Upon first blush I took this to be somewhat paradoxial however upon re-reading several times, slipping into the mind set-I find it wistful in a melancholy way. There are always certain seasons both of nature and life cycles that will draw us back into what was---things we will treasure and at times crave to re-live.. Love being the most difficult of feelings to put control upon can allow us to luxeriate in the moment and at other times demand so much more of us as we become overwhelmed with emotinal memory...I wish you well in your wanderings and hope they do not become to overwhelming. I especially liked: Under frayed ribbons of deception they beckon variegated threads of yesterday I can truly empathize with this... You left me with the feeling of comformation, peace in the knowing. Best, Lora

This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2008-10-18 23:28:15
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Marilyn, This was a soulful piece indeed. It speaks of yesterday as a cage - witholding progression...and this cage can sometimes be one of regret and one of fondness for all the happiness gone by...'stars as keyholes'...is a great image... I like this thought provoking poem and it is true...most of our yesterday's have no tomorrows..i can identify with this. Duane.

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