This Poem was Submitted By: Kenneth R. Patton On Date: 2008-10-22 10:23:23 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Lost Among the Branches The Giant White Oak
towers over our side lawn
shading the deck
A shadowy maze
of signpost leaves
and highway branches
I lounge under the enchanting scene
pondering age
and mysteries withheld
Under passing sunlight
it transforms
to cloak-and-dagger silhouettes
Approaching dawn wakens
a rustle here
a movement there
A greedy Blue Jay
knocking an acorn
pausing to peer about guardedly
Way, way up a Plucky Squirrel
working the high wire
focused on the coming winter
Chipmunks too
scramble the by-ways
for their share
Chattering curses at my interruption
they toss
acorns cracking to the deck
Scampering down
to extract their proceeds
they torment the Window Cat
Now I too have a job
cleaning a deck littered
with half-shells
The critters work is unending
but soon I linger once more
delightfully lost among the branches |
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Copyright © October 2008 Kenneth R. Patton
Additional Notes:
Been a while,feels good
This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2008-11-06 09:13:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Kenneth,
A wonderful image rich piece of your relacing moment under the sprawling branches of this tree. I like the way this piece comes together with visuals, audio and movement. Good poem !!
Duane.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2008-10-23 22:58:16
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.30769
Hi poet.....should feel good for it reads great, filled with images if the season, the leaves that cover the ground, in need of raking, yet...more to follow....love the image of the critters busy at work, getting their winter space ready filled with supplies.....acorns falling, the sounds of them as they hit th deck and ground and yes perhaps once in awhile you or me.....as we stand and watch lost among those brances.....I'm envious for my muse fell asleep and refuses to wake up......looking forward to more of your work. By the way, thank you ever so much for the copy of grampa's book that you published.......what an honor......hope you are well and that life is treating you well. Take care, God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2008-10-22 17:59:08
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Kenneth,
I can relate! I've 3 almond trees by my deck. Nuts on my head.
What a kick.
Your poem is delightful.
Nicely paced, moves along perfectly.
And I love the trees too.
And to ponder even better...
Nice job, glad you wrote in.....more please.
It's a good thing.
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2008-10-22 15:04:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Ken....your imagery in this poem is excellent. You describe the scene so well I felt as if I were sitting beside you watching the Blue Jay and Chipmunk and Squirrel. I have critters in my backyard, as well and I never tire of watching them and neither does my dog (she is yet to figure out why she can't climb a tree.) I am pleased to see you writing again...Hope it continues!
best.....M.
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