This Poem was Submitted By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2009-05-27 21:06:35 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Patterns

all the patterns of life seen and foreseen mandalas of events corners turned and now, not reverential now and now, not at all self referential as to how and there is only the small matter of now which we lose years pass as a toll while science and -ists of various minds vicariously kind fall further and further behind all laboring after illusions mere delusions of control yet life bursts out ahead beneath between intertwined and a song once, goes "time time time imaginary line" that we never see a loved one in a locket a string of attachment ever falling out the pocket for the love of irony two wire fences seen in motion, along the path create a new being a baby in the bath or in a manger God a saviour or a danger? does God have behavior thinks him who is a stranger let's argue so sweetly and categorize so neatly because we do surely "He" must, too moving more moire patterns in sand life is worthy of worried patterns and yet it happens while we make other plans

Copyright © May 2009 Regis L Chapman

Additional Notes:
Just sittin her watching the wheels go round and round...


This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2009-06-06 09:48:13
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90000
Hi Regis, There is a strong lyrical quality in the poem and the strcture here is very free inspite of the rhyme - symbolic of your characterisitic free and spontaneous flow of thought. I like the middle and to some extent the end because that is where the punch comes in. I felt the beginning was a little too cluttered. Thanks for sharing this philosophy of 'real' life. Duane.


This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2009-05-29 12:15:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Fantastic write Regis; complete in spiritual thoughts; expanding the horizon on viewing life; as it is; and how we would rather have it be. In each verse; you capture the reader; by expressing in imagery some of the defunct patterns of life - that serve no viable purpose - I'm impressed by your ideas - the voice you give to this poem - the unique phrases you have chosen to get your message out in black & white and provoke thought - instill knowledge and make this poem your own - by giving the reader such insight to things we miss in daily life. Love this; on my list - you've not settled; for less - you are trying to gain more. Blessings, Deni
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