This Poem was Submitted By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2009-07-20 11:18:38 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Inner Sanctum It comes in so many forms
thirst for reason
moment of greed
need for pleasure
Others are not a concern
feelings are only inward
passions are a blessing
thoughts are never complete
Excuses are always given
truth is always hidden
dual personalities, common
wealth of the soul never achieved
So hard to control
yet so easily found
The depths so difficult in finding the surface
yet light is found when inner strength is the focus
Addiction is from within and will be defeated there
or death will prevail…
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Copyright © July 2009 Thomas H. Smihula
This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2009-08-07 21:36:01
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I would prefer images, Thomas, AND more about the source of the voice behind these
acquired revelations. Power is in the instant and not in a platitude of it. We reach
to touch another in our poems of such a grasp at understanding and in that "touch" is
the defining difference between poetry and prose...not lyric, not rhyme, not structure at
all. Bring this poem in to "touch" its reader.
Certainly the meat to do it is here.
JCH
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2009-08-03 17:37:14
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Some deep insight within each verse of this poem. Sheer will power can be broken in an instant - temptation takes the point & wins in most cases. I like the comparison; and words you've chosen to make each image visible to the reader.
Feelings are only inward must be the thoughts of one; considering the choice - Excuses; run amok in life -
wonder who came up with the original word & why, (Smile)
Dual personalities; can be good vs bad in everyone; & I wonder how one achieves wealth of the soul except to say it must be a feeling of complete satisfaction with everything in life.
Strength has to be found every day; with the light to keep someone following it's lead -
very nicely done JC,
blessings,
Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2009-07-26 00:17:23
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Thomas,
You've said it all.
We have this void to fill and few things will suffice.
Our cup is empty and must be filled.
The only thing that matters is our relationship to the great spirit.
With patience and watchful thought it comes.
as you know.
Wonderful!
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2009-07-25 22:35:23
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Thomas,
This was a strong philosophical take on the inner sanctums of our souls. There is truth here and would make anyone stop to think. My favorite line is - 'The depths so difficult in finding the surface, yet light is found when inner strength is the focus'.
Thank you for sharing and glad to have you back.
Duane.
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